Miscellaneous:

[bloodletting_of_the_sky]

dare to be nothing out of the ordinary...
i wouldnt admit to going all out...
i stay confined to my four walled past...
never dreamed of escaping...
never could find a way out...
i dont know what i am apart from that past...
i dont know how to change the present...
i'm stuck in the same order of things...
my actions reflect all those yesterdays....
but aside from all the mistakes and fuck ups..
i'm still a boy who used to wish...
to dream and hope.. but reality became my clutter...
and now i'm damned with all the rest...
i look wistfully back to a time that i had a choice...
and that's my current paradise....
but with all the circumstances...
and all the chances i've scrapped for safer routes....
those roads i've gone down, have truned me inside out...
now the energy is sapped...
and the day is reaking bland....
there are no new ideas.. now inspiring beauty...
just a society with screwed up plans for revenge...
they plot and they scheme... and sometimes i'm thier subject...
i have made the mistake of becoming attached to some...
and then my flaw exposed... and they drag me down to hell to be condemned...
this is my fate...to be the gullible human...
considerate, giving.. caring at heart...
but my expectations are obviously to much...
and lately i've noticed that the world has never really given a fuck

[erikestabrook]

your work is always relateable blood,

this one had allot of bright spots,

and all the chances i've scrapped for safer routes....
those roads i've gone down, have truned me inside out...
now the energy is sapped...
and the day is reaking bland

I don't think I've said this you have ability,
just don't be affraid of forms or a new style as well,

you can keep onto your form which is great,
but also expand on your ideas

[bloodletting_of_the_sky]

eric!

that was like the climax of the day... your compliment, well, it gave me inspiration.... not to mention the suggestions to...
i dont think i've ever really had a form.... i just write on a spur of the moment type deal.... and then it just comes with ryhmes i never realized where there... i never like how words can seem forced.. so i always write trying to stay clear of forms, cause i'm afraid that what i put down will sound like i limited myself..

but i'm going to delibritely look for forms on google today, and take some time to study them


thankers my friend

[Smiley24_7]

You know what I noticed?
That I have a friend just about the same age as you and he writes in a similar style.
We used to have hours worth of discussions on something like you just wrote.
We talked about easy it is to become the gullible human when we dreamed we could be more, that there would be something different about us.

This poem brought about bouts of nostalgia sorry...
but reality has become our clutter too.

[Terence]

You certainly make your poetry real, Phil, something you probably can't do so easily with forms. Check 'em out but for goodness sake keep writing as you are - be yourself - as someone here wrote, you do just great.