Plight of Light

Gemini · 11-24-2006, 10:53 AM

Plight of Light

Have you ever looked and tried to find,
The secrets of the day and night,
Walk while seeing, going blind,
The pathway to the dark or light?
Have you ever looked and tried to stop,
The water going down the drain?
As you watch the hail beat the crop,
Praise the ruin and pray for rain?

You enjoy your maundering,
While you hope to break the wandering…

Do you see destruction and laugh with glee,
While your heart is breaking at its plight?
Do you grasp the dark and feel you’re free,
While inside you scream with fright?
Have you found your way and feel confused,
Arrive on time and feel too late,
Accepted life and yet refused,
Feel the love while filled with hate?

While you search for a resemblance,
Of Light in your remembrance,
Stand in rank and beat the Darkness’ drum,
Yet remember where the Dark is coming from.

Some who hold the Light
Have let the torch grow dim,
While the Dark grows and grasps,
And few will fight.
Hidden in the Dark you can
Survive…
But only in the Light you feel alive.

Test it, try it,
Find your way to freedom,
Take it, hold it,
Enter daylight’s kingdom.

Stand before the Sun,
When dark is dead, you cannot run,
Darkness at its core the light will scorch,
Stand with light; take up and light its torch.

~Serenity~ · 11-24-2006, 09:25 PM

Hi there Gemini! First I'd like to take a minute to say WELCOME to JPiC! - haven't seen you around yet - have you introduced yourself yet? If not, please do!

And, what a wonderful poem! Some very intense images here =) I especially loved this part:

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Have you found your way and feel confused,
Arrive on time and feel too late,
Accepted life and yet refused,
Feel the love while filled with hate?

The only thing is - there seems to be a style at first, but near the end of the poem it breaks down - was this intentional? Either way, very nice piece! Great write, thanks for sharing!! =)

Smiles!,
~Serenity~

Gemini · 11-25-2006, 08:49 AM

Thanks! Yes, the breakdown at the end was intentional (don't ask me why, because I don't know

) I guess because it was written as song lyrics, and It was supposed to have a few bridges.

v3sista · 11-26-2006, 01:19 AM

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Do you see destruction and laugh with glee,
While your heart is breaking at its plight?
Do you grasp the dark and feel you’re free,
While inside you scream with fright?
Have you found your way and feel confused,
Arrive on time and feel too late,
Accepted life and yet refused,
Feel the love while filled with hate?

Gemini, again I say..

You've made an impression w/ me already, straight out the box. I like your "Writes." Reading this poem reminds me how contradictary life is..keep up the good work.

Gemini · 11-29-2006, 04:08 AM

erikestabrook · 11-29-2006, 11:19 AM

we have veery similar writing styles, which I never like admitting,
some parts I felt you rhymed just to rhyme,
other than that good and nice too meet you

Gemini · 11-30-2006, 05:47 AM

Well, naturally, it's supposed to rhyme.

It's the lyrics to a song I wrote.

Altree94 · 11-30-2006, 10:07 PM

Great rhythm and nice imagery! Life is confusing and you have shown that very well, yet you have infused a lot of hope into the ending of this piece. Very enjoyable read! TY for posting!

Gemini · 12-15-2006, 08:28 AM

Thank you all very much.

stardust · 12-18-2006, 07:29 PM

Hi Gemini!! It´s my pleasure to meet you, Gemini!! Welcome to the Community for Writers, dear!! I love reading your poem. You said that, the words are the Lyrics of your Song. It´s so beautiful!! I also write Song Lyrics. The images and methapors are powerful messages for the readers. It´s so lovely!! Thank you for sharing it, Gemini!! Sincerely, Stardust.