Miscellaneous:

[MsJacquiiC]

Poetry Arrived. Period!

Poetry arrived to the very scene of me
period: I was wallowing around
in prepaid pain (never shame before)
it even knew my very own name!

I was shallow like the trenches
of Iraq – called out my name like bitches
on dranky dranks who owned snitches
on crankity crank – we knew: inadvertently.

shallow, callow, fellow of yellow pallor
Stomp!
shudder utterly of stuttered thunder
Bump!
you can’t see me.

we looked at it – laughed made horrible
fun – never knew the pun of being
called out of all our names,
for we knew the stunt of prepaid pain.

I wallow all up in my prepaid pain
“it’s over bitch,” says the feminine snake
“right here…” his voice fades – stomps
and romps pomp & circumstance…

shallow, callow, fellow of yellow pallor
Stomp!
shudder utterly of stuttered thunder
Bump!
you never wanted me.

cameras and scenes of horrid cheaters;
backgrounds and drunken wife-beaters…
poetry arrived to the very scene of me. Period.
never seen the method of more inferior.

tricks and cheap gimmicks, haters abundant;
peepin’, creepin’, and otherwise stunneded –
Poetry arrived. and you sitting on bended knee
awaiting resurrections of the Jesus in me?

shallow, callow, fellow of yellow pallor
Stomp!
shudder utterly of stuttered thunder
Bump!
you don’t know Peace!



Copyright © 2006 Jacquii Cooke

[erikestabrook]

well jacqui this is just plain killer and entertaining, Uh one piece of advice and I hate giving advice but right where it sayd i was wallowed all up in prepaid pain it start sto make teh poem go off course and winds it back up the last verses but it would be better if their was no going away from the exciting, funny, just plain fun poem that you made thanks

[MsJacquiiC]

Thanx ERIK - I also wondered about the stanza you speak of - I just wanted a bit of dialogue LOL.... Seems my Long Island Tea was writing the poem for me... Anyway - glad you liked the humor of this piece!

JAcquii.

[PaintedDiary]

Ooooooo Ms Jacquii, I love it! Very entertaining yes! The foot tappin', finger snappin' tempo you got goin' on is FIERCE girl!!! Yes, Poetry Arrived Period!!! I want this poem! The following is a little miracle to me....

tricks and cheap gimmicks, haters abundant;
peepin’, creepin’, and otherwise stunneded –
Poetry arrived. and you sitting on bended knee
awaiting resurrections of the Jesus in me?

Ohhhhhh nice imagery and syntax!! WHooohoo! I want this poem, I am not playin'! LOL!!! Nice Write Ms Jacquii. Maybe I need to experiment, hell I drink Iced Tea all the time! Just need some "Long Island"! LOL!!

Painted

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by PaintedDiary

...hell I drink Iced Tea all the time! Just need some "Long Island"! LOL!!

Painted

LOL - Thanx KIM - glad you liked this one!

Jacquii.