Miscellaneous:

[DaveKuzminski]

Clickity-click, clickity-click
Steel wheels set the driving beat
Go to sleep, go to sleep
While I race with the moon.

Clickity-click, clickity-click
Whistles sound the melody
Go to sleep, go to sleep
While we race with the moon.

Clickity-click, whistles sound
Bells ring making it more complete
Go to sleep, go to sleep
Let us race with the moon.

Clickity-click, whistles and bells
Past chorus beasts singing the song
Go to sleep, go to sleep
While you race with the moon

[alanmdouglas]

Dear Dave,

I found this post with no comments, thought I would help, but I am at a loss - I have no idea what you are getting at, but don't take that as a crit - I am very dense very often with other people's poetry.

Care to expand ?

Love
Alan

[DaveKuzminski]

Think of a train traveling at night with the sounds becoming a song to the weary passengers.

[alanmdouglas]

Dear Dave,

Well now, I did get that, but you threw me with the "beast" in the last lines - is that the loco ?

That was certainly effective, altho I would prefer to see the repeat line being an exact repeat !

Love
Alan

[JolieH]

I like this very much.
This is a great example of how use onomatopoeia. The repetition simulates the sound of train in motion. I can feel myself traveling through the night, sleeping until the moon is gone and all the scary monsters in the dreams gone with the light of day.

[DaveKuzminski]

Chorus beasts can be (your choice) other trains going the opposite direction or wildlife alongside the tracks in woods and fields.

[JolieH]

yea cool,
caught in the rhythm.