Miscellaneous:

[erikestabrook]

thanks Sealiah, well if you go abstract I feel you have to go all the way,

I didn't expect it from me either,
I must be in a very creative mood

[Jer4clarity]

Erik,

first forgive me for being such a flake. I've been in quite a quagmire and out of sorts. I did spend time making some new friends too! Today I realized I need to stop in and do some reviews. If you still want me to do some reading I will...

a fallen flights leap,
around the edge it creeps,
what is baring?
never strange nor unique,

Such intensity...because loneliness is so personal (we could be in a stadium a be lonely) some don't express it's intensity. Your first line does this for me....as this is the feeling of them lonely moment...you express here that this is no fleeting occurrence.

a glass sender gasps,
who is or isn't trapped?
reminded by a flash,
the remainder of what's left collapses,

Do I see here "a glass sender" as someone on one side of a window? Are they trapped behind the window?

mask of illusion to oneself,
no intrusion, no need for help,
to center sender without a plea,


Strong use of words here. the duality of wanting out of our loneliness yet wearing the mask so others can't really help...after all we must be centered, balanced. etc.

a gift of lonely for all who see.

If the reader has missed what this is about...well, here's your sign!


~( Jer4Clarity
Creator of the Clarity Pyramid

[erikestabrook]

thanks Jerry yeah It'd be nice if you did he readings,

glad your back here,

you dissected my poem very well

[MsJacquiiC]

Yes I do like it actually - seems a caricature of what I've been going through for the past few years. As if noone cares about the mask I wear when everyone else has the same mask on...

Interesting title too ERIK - A nice write = Thanx for the sharing

Jacquii.

[erikestabrook]

msJ everyone cares about you and if they don't they shouldn't matter