Sender with a lonely mask

erikestabrook · 11-01-2007, 02:53 PM

a fallen flights leap,
around the edge it creeps,
what is baring?
never strange nor unique,

a glass sender gasps,
who is or isn't trapped?
reminded by a flash,
the remainder of what's left collapses,

mask of illusion to oneself,
no intrusion, no need for help,
to center sender without a plea,

a gift of lonely for all who see.

nomadicrhymer · 11-01-2007, 03:45 PM

Erik,

My brain must not be working too well today, 'cause I'm totally lost on this one.

Nomad

erikestabrook · 11-01-2007, 04:05 PM

yeah it was meant to be very abstract

nomadicrhymer · 11-01-2007, 04:25 PM

Oh ok! Very nice one...Ms. J will love it!

Nomad

erikestabrook · 11-01-2007, 04:27 PM

I hope so she's the queen of that style

Mysty · 11-01-2007, 06:51 PM

Beautifully executed ..... and loneliness is abstract .... but also a living breathing thing. Awesome Erik........ truly an awesome read.

Mysty

PaintedDiary · 11-01-2007, 07:23 PM

Dear Erik,

I must have read this at least five times. This is one of your best my friend. I also LOVE the play on the abstract form to deliver your message and yet another angle of your range here. I find this poem quite captivating! It speaks volumes to me of a "lonely soul" with a glass window. We can see sometimes the "real" face, but more important is that the person realizes that the reflection is of himself or herself. There is no intrusion because the "loneliness" is intrinsic and the "mask" is real. For some reason after reading this I thought of the famous French and renowned mime Marcel Marceau, that passed away not too long ago...maybe because of the sometimes silent internal pain and still we where a mask. Thank you for sharing this Erik and an excellent rating!

Kim

nomadicrhymer · 11-01-2007, 07:48 PM

Thanks PD! You opened it up for me...sometimes I have to twist my too literal brain sideways...takes some effort!!

Nomad

erikestabrook · 11-01-2007, 08:14 PM

thanks Mysty well I'd rather have lonliness as an abstract to actually feel it is very hard,

thanks Kim

you really broke it down, there's nothing you can't understand

Sealiah · 11-01-2007, 08:15 PM

Wow Erik. Just wow. This is really great, because I didn't expect such style from you. And you did it so well! I envy your flexibility! Ms. J will definitely fave this one, because we all know how much she loves abstracts!

I hope you continue with this style, because you catch the imagination and ride it till it's too tired to move.