Miscellaneous:

[MsJacquiiC]

Dear God,

I stood, cried the tear
that noone ain't gon' cry nomore
like Ms. Mary slashed
in the face.

There I stood... Hanging.
Here I stand, shaking your blood
that knows the back of my bitter palate
like vampiric family. I stand wanting
your love like the slaughtered calf
awaiting Captain-Crunch-fresh milk.

That's how I craved
your love with glistening teeth:
the pang of a newborn hypocrisy.

Hold back - No love!
Shoot forth - Blessings above
From the parched throat
Of Goddess love.
Bitter spittle.

Black dot - I steady standed
singing such turmoiled truth & chorus,
You cannot shut me up -
I deny you!

I stand like femine man
in your stagnant treachery.
I stand and laugh in your face - Now
You.... Smile!

Stand up and be spit on!

Love always,

Jesus.

[Altree94]

Sorry, Msj! I'm CONFUSED! As a letter to God from Jesus, it seems neither realistic nor spiritual. I can't imagine these words coming from Jesus at all. He wouldn't even know about Capatain Crunch! Also "standed"? I don't think that standed is a word. Also "there I stood...Hanging". Is he standing or hanging? Can't be both at the same time!
This is creative, but not up to your usual high quality!

[MsJacquiiC]

I bit cynical to say the very least...
I think that's what this poem is about more or less - The ability to walk away after a linching in which Father turned his head and cried silently...
Anyway - not even sure what brought this piece on - but thanx for your comments MS TREE - This is not an easy read

Jacquii.

[Amzy]

A letter to God from your atheist son. I deny you because you turned your back on me. Cute idea, but your metaphors are poorly drawn. Favourite line: "The pang of a newborn hypocracy".

[MsJacquiiC]

LOL - this one was not supposed to be cute at'ALL - but was rather the outburst of a son filled with unknowable pain

Thanx for your comment AMZY

Jacquii.

ALSO comment to MS TREE's remark - well... some folks believe that Jesus watches over everything.... In which case - he would definitely know about Captain Crunch lol - but mostly... Prolly should have named this one Spiritual Vented Religion(s)

[PaintedDiary]

Dear Ms Jacquii,

This is a very interesting scribe. This is very creative. The concept to scribe such a letter is one I never would have thought of. The artistry and craft of writing in this piece speaks volumes. Thank you for sharing! Take Care.

Kim aka Painted Diary