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Old 08-25-2006, 10:19 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Dear God,

I stood, cried the tear
that noone ain't gon' cry nomore
like Ms. Mary slashed
in the face.

There I stood... Hanging.
Here I stand, shaking your blood
that knows the back of my bitter palate
like vampiric family. I stand wanting
your love like the slaughtered calf
awaiting Captain-Crunch-fresh milk.

That's how I craved
your love with glistening teeth:
the pang of a newborn hypocrisy.

Hold back - No love!
Shoot forth - Blessings above
From the parched throat
Of Goddess love.
Bitter spittle.

Black dot - I steady standed
singing such turmoiled truth & chorus,
You cannot shut me up -
I deny you!

I stand like femine man
in your stagnant treachery.
I stand and laugh in your face - Now
You.... Smile!

Stand up and be spit on!

Love always,

Jesus.



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My poetry is an emotions-fest sprinkled with a little garlic salt, Mrs. Dash, fresh ginger and Tabasco sauce...
My poetry is like a piece of General Tso's chicken tossed in ghetto soul.” ---
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Old 08-25-2006, 10:51 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Sorry, Msj! I'm CONFUSED! As a letter to God from Jesus, it seems neither realistic nor spiritual. I can't imagine these words coming from Jesus at all. He wouldn't even know about Capatain Crunch! Also "standed"? I don't think that standed is a word. Also "there I stood...Hanging". Is he standing or hanging? Can't be both at the same time!
This is creative, but not up to your usual high quality!
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Old 08-27-2006, 01:28 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I bit cynical to say the very least...
I think that's what this poem is about more or less - The ability to walk away after a linching in which Father turned his head and cried silently...
Anyway - not even sure what brought this piece on - but thanx for your comments MS TREE - This is not an easy read

Jacquii.



“I do use powerful words to evoke emotion, but also to stimulate imagination. If one can 'see' the words dance before
his eyes - then he can likely feel, smell and even taste them as well. And I do thoroughly enjoy really tasty poems.
My poetry is an emotions-fest sprinkled with a little garlic salt, Mrs. Dash, fresh ginger and Tabasco sauce...
My poetry is like a piece of General Tso's chicken tossed in ghetto soul.” ---
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Old 08-27-2006, 10:27 PM   #4 (permalink)
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A letter to God from your atheist son. I deny you because you turned your back on me. Cute idea, but your metaphors are poorly drawn. Favourite line: "The pang of a newborn hypocracy".
 

Old 10-07-2006, 11:48 PM   #5 (permalink)
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LOL - this one was not supposed to be cute at'ALL - but was rather the outburst of a son filled with unknowable pain

Thanx for your comment AMZY

Jacquii.

ALSO comment to MS TREE's remark - well... some folks believe that Jesus watches over everything.... In which case - he would definitely know about Captain Crunch lol - but mostly... Prolly should have named this one Spiritual Vented Religion(s)



“I do use powerful words to evoke emotion, but also to stimulate imagination. If one can 'see' the words dance before
his eyes - then he can likely feel, smell and even taste them as well. And I do thoroughly enjoy really tasty poems.
My poetry is an emotions-fest sprinkled with a little garlic salt, Mrs. Dash, fresh ginger and Tabasco sauce...
My poetry is like a piece of General Tso's chicken tossed in ghetto soul.” ---
MsJacquiiC



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Old 10-08-2006, 01:29 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Dear Ms Jacquii,

This is a very interesting scribe. This is very creative. The concept to scribe such a letter is one I never would have thought of. The artistry and craft of writing in this piece speaks volumes. Thank you for sharing! Take Care.

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