Spring

Bear · 03-20-2008, 03:07 PM

Spring,
Sweet refreshing spring, Lilacs blossoming
And waltz in the gentle cool breeze
Cardinals, sparrows, doves and robins sing.
The aroma of lilacs drift about on the carefree breeze
White and pink flowering trees line the street
With the refreshing scent of Apple and Cherry blossoms
As the heart leaves sail through the flittering wind
Signaling the start of new life
Spring

MsJacquiiC · 03-21-2008, 01:30 AM

Oooo! This is just so beautifully lilting - it's like a singsong verse - the aroma you can almost smell because you've descibed so intricately.

I like this poem TOM and will make an exception to the Greeting Card Aspirations Guidelines --- Generally I like the poem to be between 4 - 8 lines as noted - You have 9 lines (not counting the title of course) - but that last "Spring" just emphasizes the poem - just as if you're fading away with a sigh: Spring....... Like a fond memory LOL - beautifully written and I think a wonderful contribution - I think it will make a lovely e-Card

Thanx for posting and sharing your poem!

Jacquii.

Intricate soul · 03-21-2008, 02:53 AM

do you have poui trees where you live? I'm not even sure if it grows in the states, but we don't have spring~ still i think a poui tree in blossom is so beautiful, this reminds me of that.... nice mental pic thanks again Bear.

butchiesmom · 03-21-2008, 11:04 AM

Spring...peepers singing their annual song...lilacs, dogwoods, apple and cherry trees blooming, leaves sponge painted on the trees, forsythias electric blossoms lighting the way for tulips and daffodils. This brings back so many memories of spring in western PA.

The line about lilacs blossoming brought back all of that. I thank you for the memories and am so glad Jacquii's decided to put it in a greeting card.

hugs,
Gail

Bear · 01:22 PM

Thank you so much IntricateSoul for your most delightful comment no we dont have poui treee in the states I think we're to cold where I live thank you again
handshakes my friend
bear

Thank you so much Gail I know what you mean where are so many blooming trees but I always try to make the readers visualize what I am writing about and also bring back memories of their seasons and nature surroundings
hugs kisses
bear
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Thank you so very very much Jacquii for your great comments on both my poems
hugs kisses
bear

butchiesmom · 03-21-2008, 01:30 PM

Your poem brought back so many memories of Spring. I prefer to think of it as 'The Greening'. The colors are so spectacular and the sky so blue it could make you cry with happiness. I find the first warm gentle breeze on my bare arms wonderful!
Gail