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Old 03-17-2008, 07:32 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Her legs tangle with his
Answering "Do you still love me?" with a smile.
He seems to forget their differences for a moment
Although she wouldn't.
Spring came early, the morning light reflects in her eyes,
He takes one look and smiles.
A silence they share, a feeling they're both accquainted with.
As tears gather she lowers her head to block his view,
A sight he need not see.
Suddenly her hands are empty
And she's left counting days again.
 

Old 04-18-2008, 11:52 AM   #2 (permalink)
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This is a very nice poem, simple and clear and well-written.
Many thanks Flookyyy.
 

Old 05-23-2008, 08:08 PM   #3 (permalink)
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thank you (:
flook x
 

Old 05-24-2008, 02:24 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I love your writing. So clear and easy to understand. I find myself feeling sorry for the woman who takes her share from another woman's man. I can almost feel her pain and almost pity her because she'll never have what she really wants.

Great job, as usual, Flookyyy!
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Old 05-24-2008, 11:38 PM   #5 (permalink)
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ok, pretend i'm really dumb, but i dont understand this one. i get that its a guy and a girl and there is some kind of trouble but i'm not sure what and i kinda missed the whole thing. thats the first time thats ever happened. i feel kinda dumb.

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Old 05-25-2008, 08:48 AM   #6 (permalink)
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no need to feel dumb!
i like it when people draw different conclusions from my poetry.
however, i will send you a private e-mail specifically explaining this poem.
(:
flook x
 

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