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[MsJacquiiC]

Tag Poetry #6 - Graduation Day (Dual of Lovers)
Featuring Poets (alternating lines): erikestabrook & MsJacquiiC

Graduation day
I'm left here with nothing to say,
my pennance wasn't sweet relief,
the price was hers to pay,

And what a price was paid
considering my prepaid beliefs...
Of course economics class I dreamed away.
I flitted away like money; Dew on the leaf.

had I kept you not below, but beneath
maybe less now my heart would sink,
what can dew on a leaf be but the summation of my cries, nothing dry,
except somehow its not enough of a release to let it go by,

Betrayal my darling? You dare speak, your heart strings
like algebra without symmetrical geometry and home training?
This madness of rhyme we planned. This salty scheme
of nothingness. My tear-rain is but a GED. Rise hired.

dare I speak. lest I let time become a thief
once again for the rest of my life,
speak once more as before, it makes it doubly easier to remember,
how our love exploded in my face like a fallen star,

Supernova that day at Columbine
Me the puppet of purposeless gybing
That want of education blew up in my face
Now I'm but a ghost, simply vybing like poetic grace.

[mistyllspoetry]

A good write from two good writers- I loved these lines-

And what a price was paid
considering my prepaid beliefs...
Of course economics class I dreamed away.
I flitted away like money; Dew on the leaf.


I don't miss being in school it was only
a bomb to me. Graduation Day was the
best in 1994 wow how time goes by.

[MsJacquiiC]

Thanx for commenting MISTY - I think after 2nd and 3rd and 4th read - this poem kinda grows on me - It was certainly interesting collabing with the uber-talented ERIKESTABROOK - Anyway........ Thanx.

Jacquii.

[erikestabrook]

thanks for commenting Misty

[PaintedDiary]

An outstanding write Ms Jacquii and Erik!!!! I must say the content was very intriguing and unique. It was very very difficult to pick out specific lines, however, the last stanzas are simply screaming, amazing, and chilling! Many emotions entwined in this collab on personal, poetic, and social levels. Pondering upon the elements is an understatement, this is memorable. Outstanding collab my friends, outstanding indeed.

Betrayal my darling? You dare speak, your heart strings
like algebra without symmetrical geometry and home training?
This madness of rhyme we planned. This salty scheme
of nothingness. My tear-rain is but a GED. Rise hired.

dare I speak. lest I let time become a thief
once again for the rest of my life,
speak once more as before, it makes it doubly easier to remember,
how our love exploded in my face like a fallen star,

Supernova that day at Columbine
Me the puppet of purposeless gybing
That want of education blew up in my face
Now I'm but a ghost, simply vybing like poetic grace.

Kim

[erikestabrook]

thanks Kimsy,it feels good to hear postive things again,
although msJ and I pissed each other off in the process,

we certainly did create feelings

[MsJacquiiC]

ROFL - who doth do the pissing of off? LOL
Anyway- I thought it was a good collabo afterall - such personal feelings - strong feelings went into the creation of this poem - so after reading and re-reading - I tend to actually like the completed....

Thanx MS KIM for commenting

Jacquii.