Miscellaneous:

[Target Practice]

In Gods and guiding lights I hid my lies,
let conscience play her patient waiting game.
When consequence becomes a side effect
tomorrow, I pretend you don't exist.

Cry hero, wolf? The difference is honesty,
I've made my peace, I know what I am.
So call me martyr, bite your lying tongue
and swear each new betrayal is the last.

You're nothing but mine in retrospect
- the only end that my means would allow.
Apologies would only be more lies,
so rest assured - this couldn't be less personal.
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There we go, that's actually the first piece I've written in about four years, so you'll have to excuse my rustiness. I've based it loosely around Iambic Pentameter, although I've broken that structure deliberately where necessary - I'd also probably like it to be a little longer, but such is life when you're getting back to grips with your muse...

[MsJacquiiC]

Hiya Jason and welcome! Feel free to introduce yourself over at the Member Introductions section

Nice of you to share this piece with us. It's deep. There's layers of meaning in this - I feel as if I can come back to it and each time the re-read presents another facet that I'd not quite seen on previous read. It's an emotional write, this one. A battle within, brewing as if a teabag steeped in ... acceptance?

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I've made my peace, I know what I am.
So call me martyr, bite your lying tongue
and swear each new betrayal is the last.

There's bitterness, the tea needs sweetener.

These seem like the words I would write to an old boyfriend, one who's hooked on drugs. The lies, the betrayal, the hope that he will kick the habit, the disappointment that he doesn't, and I still noble, loving him, yet I must move on. It hurts. And it's personal. Real personal.

((Despite the last line...... or goodbye...))

Anyway - makes for an interesting read. I'm rambling...So I'll stop with thanks for the share ==> I'd be most interested in knowing the backstory of this one? Was it written to an old fling?

Jacquii.

[Target Practice]

It's interesting that you picked that particular meaning out of it, Jacquii - I do like playing with a certain degree of ambiguity in my writing, perhaps to the detriment of my pieces sometimes!
Anyway, the 'main' thought I had in my mind whilst writing this piece was of a deeply unpleasant and cold person writing a letter to leave on the table of a one-night stand, although as previously mentioned, I tried to allow sufficient room for the reader's imagination to manoeuvre into something they'll connect with a little more - I'm glad it worked for you!

[Curtis Spider Lee]

I welcome you to the JPIC Target!
This kind of writing is truly welcome as well!
I thank you for sharing this work and it's very realistic views.
I do hope to read more from you.
Nicely done!

[MsJacquiiC]

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Originally Posted by Target Practice

It's interesting that you picked that particular meaning out of it, Jacquii - I do like playing with a certain degree of ambiguity in my writing, perhaps to the detriment of my pieces sometimes!
Anyway, the 'main' thought I had in my mind whilst writing this piece was of a deeply unpleasant and cold person writing a letter to leave on the table of a one-night stand, although as previously mentioned, I tried to allow sufficient room for the reader's imagination to manoeuvre into something they'll connect with a little more - I'm glad it worked for you!

Ambiguity and double entendre! Makes for intriguing interpretation of your writing actually, and almost never is to the detriment of a piece. I appreciate this write very much - the language is beautifully placed imo. And oooo! I do like the main concept behind this write. I didn't really think of the narrator as a cold person. I saw the narrator as writing TO a cold person or rather commenting on the state of a bygone relationship

Anyway - an enjoyable read and like Curtis said = realistic. It's the poetry that people can relate to. This is gonna sound cliche lol - but it's John Keats (I believe) who said, "Poetry should surprise by a fine excess and not by singularity - it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts, and appear almost a remembrance."

You did that!