04-04-2008, 03:11 PM
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Re: These Walls
Hi Holly,
Did u mean "Everything has gotten smaller"
I understand the explanation, but within the poem itself you write:
The barren walls of the past
Have written on my walls of
Forever and today...
almost as if you took some of the pain with you. I'm happy to hear that that's not the case, though. The poem is full of angst but after your explanation I can see that the last verse is a cutting away of the pain, sort of.
Very well done on the follow through of the emotion and the flow of the piece.
Nomad
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