Miscellaneous:

[jakeminick]

To properly bare one's soul...
One may refrain
From taking things seriously.
One may be aware
That droplets of wisdom
May in fact carry disease.
That infatuation
May lead to hypnotic obsessions
Causing one to dedicate existence
To fixated ideologies.
One may dance on the doldrums
Of one's neurosis,
Finding the occasional
Clear path to serenity.
Though one may not
Fall in love with
The past images
Of these deities.

No

No

No

No

No

No

No...

Naughty stripper,

Cosmetic surgery
Is not permitted...
Let things sag
As they will
And continue dancing.
Alter the stance
If the reflection is nasty.
Because if ideas
Do not age

They are made of plastic.


[while this is more of an entertainment piece, i would like to say that it seems that there are some expressions of wisdom that have stood the test of time. though in my opinion, far less than a large portion of humans will ever admit.]

[erikestabrook]

jake this should get praise, its refreshing, and I think the dulldrums of poetry can take heed,

[MsJacquiiC]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by jakeminick

No

No

No

No

No

No

No...

Naughty stripper,

Cosmetic surgery
Is not permitted...
Let things sag
As they will
And continue dancing.

Well - I suppose it's pointless to ask you to donate to what I call the Jacquii Cooke's Big Titties fund... Anyway - an intriguing piece of poetry Jake. Sounds like sage advice if one can take it - In my experience though, one is lucky if he/she can take even his/her own sage advice LOL

Thanks for the share.

Jacquii.

[SuzyQ]

Very good piece, Jake. I love multi-level poems such as this. Entertaining on several levels. There is wisdom hidden under and between your words.... finding the deeper meaning is the best part.

I have found your writing (what I've read so far) to be quite abstract - almost extreme - but this one had a good mix. Just enough imagery sprinkled in that I could easily grasp it.

SuzyQ