Miscellaneous:

[Eric]

Tragedy of leaves
falling
silent

Falling
with a whisper
of parchment thin skin

Falling
soldier's felled
by Autumn's fire

Bleeding
colors
into the ground

Falling
brittle skin whispering
the language of loss.

[Mysty]

Oh.... to put shut a spin on the beauty and glory of autumn. I think autumn is a leaf's time to really shine. They give such beauty and life with their short span of life. Then fall to be reborn come spring. You did this and it shows how you seem to feel autumn is a season of death. Well to each their own lol. I find autumn glorious .... I did like the way you made the poem flow ... your view is very interesting too. I love seeing how others view my favorite season. Thanks for sharing Eric.


Mysty

[Flookyyy]

I agree with Mysty - I like how you've given a different view of Autumn, contrasting with the stereotypical view of it. Nice work

Flook x

[Eric]

Mysty,

Autumn is my favorite time of your as well, I love all the color and vibrancy of Autumn but, this was not that kind of poem. Just a somber take on Autumn. My poem reflects certain moods at certain times and I go where they take me. Thank you for your comments, I do appreciate them.

Eric
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Thank you for your comments, I appreciate them, they are what help me grow as an artist and student of the word.

[Eric]

Dear Flook,
Would love to write a poem for and about you, you are a poem in and of yourself.

[Flookyyy]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Eric

Dear Flook,
Would love to write a poem for and about you, you are a poem in and of yourself.

I don't know whether to be flattered... Care to elaborate on that?

Flook x

[Eric]

Flook,
I meant no offense, I was referring to the picture on your profile. You have very soulful, magic eyes. I hope that I did not offend you that was not my intention at all. I write what I see and I see a poem in your face and eyes.


Eric (Ravenwing)

[PaintedDiary]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Eric

Tragedy of leaves
falling
silent

Falling
with a whisper
of parchment thin skin

Falling
soldier's felled
by Autumn's fire

Bleeding
colors
into the ground

Falling
brittle skin whispering
the language of loss.

Dear Eric,

This is something here. I see the experimentation and also bordering on abstract (which I love as well). You took the season of Autumn and with a spin scribed a somber side to the usually looked upon beautiful bright-colored leaves and etc. vision. I love this and it is going into my favorites!

That title also is most fitting and a attention grabber! Love it...every word of it. Autumn is my favorite season as well.

Kim

[Flookyyy]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Eric

Flook,
I meant no offense, I was referring to the picture on your profile. You have very soulful, magic eyes. I hope that I did not offend you that was not my intention at all. I write what I see and I see a poem in your face and eyes.


Eric (Ravenwing)

No no no, I knew you didn't mean it in offence... I'm extremely flattered, I just wanted to know what you meant in more detail.
But again, I am highly flattered that you think this If you were to write a poem based on me, I would more than love to give my personal response on it.
However, in no way am I pressurizing you to do so.
Thank you again

Flook x

[butchiesmom]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Eric

Falling
soldier's felled
by Autumn's fire

Bleeding
colors
into the ground

I found the above lines to be the most vivid. Watching the leaves falling to the ground like soldiers falling from gun fire, their blood staining the earth as they slowly die! Love it!

I have one question. In this line...soldier's felled...you have soldier's which is a possessive pronoun. Did you mean to say ...soldiers, which would be a multiple meaning many soldiers falling?

hugs,
Gail