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[shayshay741]

First draft... also have to submit this as part of a project along with 7 other peoms. Any kind of critique would be wondeful. Thanks, you guys here rock! :]


A single sudden glance was all it took
Just one look and I was instantly hooked
The whole world shifted right beneath me
Everything changed, somehow moved slightly
My life’s priorities rearranged in one moment
My desires, dreams, hopes, became now different
A single face, a single name now fills my head
Past loves and people are simply shed
Out of the blue, things seemed to happen
By chance or destiny is the question.

[rosesanddeath]

nice poem, i like it. its easy to relate to too, i kinda know how you feel. but yeah, its a little short, so maybe just add a few lines in there to help rap it up nicely. otherwise its really good though.