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Old 10-11-2006, 12:54 PM   #1 (permalink)
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the path beneath the garden,
in stand upon a tree you sink,

life's gotten so much better,
no longer tattered by the weather,
were your lilies,

An amassing splendor,
torn away by a feather-like motion,
the path lit up swollen with life,

Around me you seek,
your way out of the way,
you can't sparkle like a mirror,
when it gets so much clearer,
no one can make your garden more serene,

When you seek such strange company,
as if its barely begun for you,
the storm never reached your door,
no one knows where you came from,
or what you have in store,

Glowing in your garden,
growing as if ignoring the Fall,
the lamps of giant-fireflies in trees,
lead you to beseech the time,
where you would seek a gift of nature supreme,

Roses 20 feet high as if poped out of dreams,
still you find your garden,
lacking something solemn,

as it passes by Winter,
the eternal thanks you give,
for lovely as we are,
make a dove's lovely embrace,

you found what your garden was missing,
a well of eternal smiles,

Whilst time changes,
your garden eternal will rest as blessed,
as the Gods who came,

In it you run around,
the keeper of the worlds' purity,
protector of Spring and,
the holy eternal grace.
 

Old 10-14-2006, 10:19 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Dear Erik,

This was a quite a read. Different flavor for you. I see you are branching out, and experimenting, and that is great. What was your inspiration / motivation for this?

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Old 10-15-2006, 12:36 PM   #3 (permalink)
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my motivation was really wnating to write a fantasy piece and I stuck with a garden theme since I'v e written some of my better poems about gardens,
I searched for the name eternal garden because as a title it popped inmy head, and then i thought of diferent ways to describe freys the norse goddes of fertility who I call the goddess of Spring, so I penned this that way
 

Old 10-16-2006, 12:16 AM   #4 (permalink)
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This is a beautiful piece, Erik! I especially liked your lines:
"you found what your garden was missing,
a well of eternal smiles,"
Sure wish I could find one of those in my garden!
Good description all through this poem. TY for posting!
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Old 10-16-2006, 12:20 PM   #5 (permalink)
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thanks tree, yeah that part made it undoubtedly fantasy its a good thought i guess you think so too
 

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HI Erik!! I love this one, your poem. "Glowing in your garden..." Your words are like full blossoms in the sky of a Spring day. Thank you for sharing it!! Love it!! Stardust.
 

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thanks stardust I like your comments they are really special and cool,
yeah I just made the book that includes this poem, I expanded it to three poems and made it more a mythlogical story
 

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HI ERIK!! WOW!! I did not know that, you are a Professional Writter. You wrote a BOOK!!...Congratulations, dear!! I love this special poem of yours. Please, keep them flowing from your heart of hearts!! Sincerely, Stardust.
 

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thanks stardust, I'll keep doing that,
 

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Wonderful flow...a really nice piece of work!
 


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