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Old 07-26-2011, 07:31 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Alpine Doves dance a letter "s"
of skies whispering Silent Grace
aspen dipped feathers flicker 'tween
cotton candy above

Principalities gather amongst revered
Romanesque marble columns
wrapped in golden light of gossamer

Tibetan bells sing sacred symbols
tickling ears that hear Heaven
tranquility entwines the power of crystal
birthed from Mother Gaia's womb

Kissing star-lit ladders
ascending to one named Jacob
beauty trembling 'neath hypnotized feet
my bones elongate to parallel
such Silent Grace




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Old 08-01-2011, 08:49 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Tibetan bells sing sacred symbols
tickling ears that hear Heaven
tranquility entwines the power of crystal
birthed from Mother Gaia's womb
Hiya Kim, This poem is exquisite in it's entirety however I do have a few suggestions. It is for the above stanza.

"Tibetan bells joyously sound
sacred symbols tickle ears that hear Heaven
tranquility sifts thru the power of crystal
birthed from Gaia's womb"

Gaia is synonymous with Mother so that having "Mother Gaia" is sort of redundant. These are only suggestions however Kim as I said this whole poem is exquisite. It makes my faith sing loudly inside me.
Thanks for not letting me miss this one.

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Old 08-01-2011, 10:19 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Thank you so much Mysty for taking time to read and comment! Thank you also for the suggestions as well. I love both versions. Gaia is indeed associated with Mother, however, my perspective is to always title her, so it was refreshing to read your perspective. Thank you so much Mysty!!

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