Spiritual Poems:

[Wind]

The Story Of The Lonely Princess

I sat here from the start of the golden waves to the leaving of the darken blues skies.I often dream of what away from the tower i seat in everyday,I often wish for someone to come and save me and show me the world with no fear of death around the corner.To feel the grass under my toes and the wind in my hair could you believe that everything is harmonize in one with that dream.Me as the princess am only allowed to dream and not leave this place with only one window and one door.I sing to the skies and the animals that run and fly freely.Take me with i would say.I'm placing my dreams away for the are all that i have left.farewell world of the free and brave.

[Morning Star]

Very lovely.

I also wish to be in that place of freedom you describe, in nature's beauty and surrounded by animals.

Regards

Morning Star

p.s. I really like your prose-poetry

[Wind]

^^ thank you again

[budeeb]

wow, I'm loving the imagery.

[Wind]

why thank you

[MsJacquiiC]

I love the imagery as well - it's a soothing place to be, so it reads... I would challenge you again though Ms. Wind to edit your poetry with a fine-toothed comb before posting it. You've a few grammatical errors and some spelling issues. An edit process would make your writing more polished and less-likely to get passed over by those hoping to read a work with fewer errors.

Anyway - Love this dreamscape you've described. Sounds so tranquil and filled with peace.

Thanks for sharing

J.

[Wind]

Thank you i'm still am gettign around to the spelling since i never look at the screen when i type but i am getting good with the grammer

[MsJacquiiC]

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Originally Posted by Wind

i'm still am gettign around to the spelling since i never look at the screen when i type

Maybe start looking at the screen then? LOL
The reason I say so is because who knows - perhaps you have a writing career in your future. It's better to learn the edit concept now - it'll make your future publications much better - at anyrate - I enjoyed your poem

[JerryK]

Hi there, Wind;
I hope you don't mind my critique? Well, I do see potentials in this write, however, as it stands, I look at it as a first draft that needs to be polished, and by that I mean punctuation and grammar. Punctuation requires one blank space after the comma and two spaces after the period. I see run-on sentences as well. Also, a new sentence following the period must begin with a capital letter. Below, I've highlighted the most-unclear words or characters in red. While it doesn't cover everything in your text, it is a start; okay? Take care.
Jerry

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by Wind

The Story Of The Lonely Princess

I sat here from the start of the golden waves to the leaving of the darken blues skies.I often dream of what away from the tower i seat in everyday,I often wish for someone to come and save me and show me the world with no fear of death around the corner.To feel the grass under my toes and the wind in my hair could you believe that everything is harmonize in one with that dream.Me as the princess am only allowed to dream and not leave this place with only one window and one door.I sing to the skies and the animals that run and fly freely.Take me with i would say.I'm placing my dreams away for the are all that i have left. farewell world of the free and brave.

[Wind]

your right this is the first draft of it but beside that i posted it i love whatever standing point i can get so i thank you but i'm still getting into making the proper grammer and what not.yes it a wonderful start i need to study more and pratice ^^