Spoken Word & Freestyle:

[PaintedDiary]

I am not afraid
to straighten my spine
shake that monkey
break that chain
royal blood leaves a Crimson stain
and still I shall rise like a Phoenix

I am Painted Diary
tall as a Cypress
long as the Nile
malleable as Cleopatra's Gold
and still I shall rise like a Phoenix

Greatness walks with me
mountains applaud my soliloquy
I am Painted Diary and my
heart speaks phonetically
and still I shall rise like a Phoenix

Watchful eyes sharply pierce
God's hand break me free
from indiginous ashes I burn
and still I shall rise like a Phoenix

[FaShaBaby]

Whoa! That was hot.

I love the flow and rhtyhm. The confidence was oozing out, it was contagious. I feel good about MYSELF after reading that.

"I am not afraid
to straighten my spine
shake that monkey
break that chain
royal blood leaves a Crimson stain
and still I shall rise like a Phoenix"

That first stanza was excellent. It set the tone right away.

Very nice!

[MsJacquiiC]

::SIZZLE::

Hey KIM - That is prolly the most AWESOME piece I've had the pleasure to read of yours... That was really some piece of writing - I tell ya what! This write speaks to me of empowerment. This write speaks to me of a perseverance so strong that it's really almost a miracle of sorts. This write speaks to me of overcoming such turmoil, as to rise to be the BigBalla on the block of all blocks.

and still I shall rise like a Phoenix

Greatness walks with me
mountains applaud my soliloquy

Yeah - I heard that! Tell 'em loud - Tell 'em proud! And don't look back as they gawk at you!

Thanx for sharing this brilliant piece!

Jacquii.

[KingAce]

The Following Text Is Quoted:

Originally Posted by PaintedDiary

Watchful eyes sharply pierce
God's hand break me free
from indiginous ashes I burn
and still I shall rise like a Phoenix

I enjoy poems like this the most because they are abstract and allows the reader to create their own meaning and image of waht this poem is saying...I quoted that part specifically because it sums up and also ends the poem very well, Hopefully I'll see more from you soon

[PaintedDiary]

Thank you so much Ms Jacquii, Ms FaSha, KingAce first for taking time to read, then commenting. I felt very good about this piece when scribing. Your comments are heartfelt, and well needed. I thought, I was going through a dry spell, until I read these comments. Thanks for the uplift.

Much Luv'...~*Painted Diary*~

[michael]

Hello Painted

I thought that this came across as such a strong piece. Very uplifting. Your poetic flow is amazing. Also it reminds me of fear or fear's which would hinder one from straightening their on spine.

keep up your flow
p.s. you must write about ten poems aday....and you know you all dat

[TrueBlue]

I like the sense of strength and confidence in this one.

[thelioness]

I like this because of the confidence. You're not afraid to toot your own horn. You go girl!

[TrueBlue]

Mother Theresa once said that the poverty in the homeless of America was worse than the physical poverty in the third world countries in many ways. Poems can help with this because they can inspire and they can help teach or reinforce the idea that humanity is important and special and divine. you did that in your poem, comparing yourself, confidently, with the wealth of nature around you. so this was a powerful poem. did it have a lot of personal meaning for you? also i like your line about god's hand breaking you free? too often god makes people afraid instead of religiously joyous. fear of punishment is big. and big cities don't always support feelings of holiness, i think. i don't know if i am wrong in saying that. anyway i liked your poem. -p.s. i also liked how you kept an inter-relation between yourself and nature. it seems like you are not seperate. should be that way.

[mcglinnen]

“I am not afraid”

What a strong beginning to a poem! From there you assault us with the strength of your words, your convictions.

“God's hand break me free
from indigenous ashes I burn “

The imagery works wonderfully. Yes, I fine poem I would humbly say.

David