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Old 03-20-2008, 03:37 PM
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A soft silken kiss like that of a rose petal
Exposes the passion within as two lovers indulge
In an evening of sultry dancing
Holding each other close our bodies sway and twirl
A soft gentle sigh escapes from her soft ruby lips
Followed by an evanescent smile and her faint whisper,
"Again."
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Old 03-21-2008, 02:36 AM
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Hey TOM - thanx for posting - but please familiarize yourself with the Greeting Card Aspirations Guidelines - If you choose to and can edit this little beauty down to 8 or less lines - I'll be happy to accept it!

It's a wonderful poem though - the word "evanescent" is just one of those poetic gems that always makes me smile.

A very nice write = Thanx for the sharing.
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A soft silken rose petal kiss exposes the passion within
two lovers indulge in an evening of sultry dance
Holding each other close our bodies sway and twirl
A soft gentle sigh escapes from her lips
Followed by an evanescent smile and faint whisper,
"Again"
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Muy Bien senor! gracias por escritura...



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I like the imagery of this poem. After reading the one about Spring, I can see why you won that award. Your poetry is excellent! I could see everything and was so jealous, lol.

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Thank you so much IntricateSoul for your great comment so happy you enjoyed this poem
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Thank you so much Gail for your great comment and your suggestions I have made the changes again thank you
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This reads so much tighter and enhances the image you want to invoke!
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Dear Bear,

This is wonderful..."evanescent"...oh is one of my favorite words. Beautiful...and would read just as beautiful on the card. Thank you for sharing.

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