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One,Two,Three



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Posted By Wind on Nov 8, 2012 at 10:38 PM

Thank you for viewing and I do NOT own the picture and the songs.
I do however own the poem.


One,Two,Three


I'm dreaming with mother
I'm dancing with father
i'm laughing with brother
i'm dressing up with sister
i'm sitting in grandfather's lap
i'm talking to grandmother
i'm singing with auntie
i'm helping unlce
i'm dressing cousin
One by one
Two and two
Three to four
There is no war,that can tear me from you
Five by five
Six and six
Seven to eight
This was the last memory I have of you all.Catch me,free me,bring me back to life,watch over me,and set peace over my head.
Nine by nine
Ten and ten
Eleven to twelve
What more could I'll tell you? Did you not hear the words that came from my mouth as I ran toward you?
One by two
Three and four
Five to six
Catch me when I fall.
Free me from my chains.
Bring me back to life and away from the grave.
Watch over me while I walk through this valley of the ignorant and dead.
Set the peace over my head,that i may control what fury I carry inside.
Seven by eight
Nine and ten
Should we use are words and speak and use are actions and break one another? What reason could we show if we lose part in memories that were so perfect and harmless.
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Nine
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Just how many times must i say it again?
I'm dreaming with mother
I'm dancing with father
i'm laughing with brother
i'm dressing up with sister
i'm sitting in grandfather's lap
i'm talking to grandmother
i'm singing with auntie
i'm helping unlce
i'm dressing cousin
What a peaceful exist this is and should always be.

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  1. Wind
    Yes not paying attention while writing does that and i should correct them i suppose.
    And i guess i have a prideful way of not letting the "love" word come out of my mouth to often
    Nov 12, 2012
  2. MsJacquiiC
    Familiar love. Classically familiar love...? Not silly at all. But in my case - perhaps more dream than reality. Loved this piece though. Serenity Now: Peace! "What a peaceful existence this is and should always be."

    Lovely sentiments. Not silly at all.

    You've misspelled 'uncle' twice though.

    J.
    Nov 12, 2012
  3. Wind
    Ah no...in the moment i heard the word dreaming and mother then a whole list of thing filled up from my past so...Silly of me to have turned it into a poem but I'm glad it was enjoyed.And yes I would like to learn in how to keep improving in my writing skills
    Nov 10, 2012
  4. butchiesmom
    Is this the memories of a loved one now deceased? If so, I think it a unique way of remembering someone you loved. I loved it, Wind. I did find a few mistakes and would love to share them with you if that's ok with you.
    Great right, Wind.
    Nov 9, 2012
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