MetricalSonneteer

Somebody sent to my e-mail this morning a message on joining this writers' forum. How the hell did they reach my e-mail - I do not know; but I'm not complaining. Just as a small intro to who I am (take this under poetic licence and having been written months ago), here's a sonnet - you'll get to see a lot of them by me - I wrote about myself - with a perfect Petrarchan acrostic!

Sonnet XV: Onself
Judgemental, harsh and hypercritical
Of what sounds far and certainly unclear;
Not knowing but the ones who’re known as queer
And most eccentric; hypocritical.
The one whose life’s most non-political –
He has opinions, thinks himself a seer;
All books may read, yet might not lend an ear;
Nor have tact, though he’s analytical.
How can this one be saved from being all lost
Or doomed in life to have no sure success
When he is both in sunshine and in frost,
And be in constant fight to stop regress?
Rough, wrong polymathy shall lead to doom,
Doomed failure, no success; he’ll never bloom.

This one was reviewed by the sonnets board off sonnets.org, so I count this as "acceptable" in my limited collection.

I'm a 16 y.o. Autralian-descending poet, high-school student, physically and socially deprived lover, aspiring cantor, (hopefully future) singer, who's living and being weaned in Israel, with a highly-flavoured metrical taste to my poetry. Though I am working on small, unmetrical proverbs (that tend to resemble or form into haikus) - maybe I'll evolve from there. Insofar, I am by far a sonnetee, though I've written limericks, Spenserian stanzas, villanelles and a sestina.

Cheers, and I hope to stick around here in the next few days,
Jonny

MsJacquiiC

Hi METRICAL - 1st Welcome to JPiC - I had to do a bit of magic to find your email address But it seems like this is an amazing find - Highly trained in the art of poesy - AND blessing us with a beautiful sonnet ((you may want to repost just the piece itself in the Creative Traditional section within the Poetic Colours forum))

2nd - I'm liking the style of your poem - Though it is of a very cynical nature - the language you've used is just so beautiful. Very well thought-out and nice read!

Again WELCOME - I'm sure you'll just love it here

Jacquii.



btw - favorite lines from your piece spell out the word HOW:

Very interesting question within your writing - I wonder if you have an answer?

Altree94

Hey Jonny!
Glad to have a poet of such skill joining us here! If you like different poetic forms, you've really come to the right place!
I went first to the Acrostic Intoduction Game that I started, then I realized that you must have posted your acrostic here! If you like challenges, try another one for the game, using "MetricalSonneteer"!
And don't be so harsh on yourself! LOL! It is quite obvious that you have a lot of talent and as you get to know your way around the forum, you'll be blooming in no time!



- Tree.

PaintedDiary

Jonny to the JPiC Community for Writers!!!!! Nice to read ya!!!! What a wonderful intro! LOL!! We are a community of diversity, amazing talent, and warmth. Please make yourself comfortable, enjoy the full realm of the Forum, and have a great time! If you need assistance, please do not hesitate to ask me or send me a PM. I look forward to reading your works. Take Care.

Painted Diary aka Kimberly