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Miscellaneous Have a poetic style of your own? Have poems that defies all conventional categories? Share them here please. (i.e. dark & bitter, political, revolutionary, abstract, etcetera...)

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Old 09-28-2008, 12:38 AM
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Alone in the dust
I've never felt like this before
All my feelings about to pour
Like falling rain, out from the clouds
Feeling like I'm about to drown

But I resist, and resist
For its not worth crying over this
You like her, me, and and maybe even her
Whose to say your feelings for me will conquer?

But I keep hope
All rapped up in this
For all I have
Is one simple wish

Whoever you choose
Whoever you love
That you'll never leave me
Alone in the dust....
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Old 09-28-2008, 03:42 AM
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Wow.... how many have
felt these pings of pain
you are writing about
here.

Uncertainty.... it can
drive a mind into all sorts
of directions, when it
really wants to feel and
be captured in the arms
of the being it's smitten
with.

Not distant, cold and
bereft of their care.

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Ohmygoodness,
How I can identify with this.
I might, even be in this situation now.
A thumbs up for you
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lol thanks, good to know i'm not alone =D
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