MiscellaneousHave a poetic style of your own? Have poems that defies all conventional categories? Share them here please. (i.e. dark & bitter, political, revolutionary, abstract, etcetera...) a painful poem
Keep loving me
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Keep loving me
When I spill, these heart contents,
how do you feel? aside from wretched and reckless,
Tell me why do your lies sit in the shade?
who gave them the right to be,
so comfortably killing me,
I'm not being vain,
asking just for some for me,
like I'm not included, feel so prostituted,
I'm fit for a grave,
When you say your right,
you'll always be right,
and I'm not worthy of this fight,
If you don't remember you left me,
in a cold February,
I'm not the one who's bitter,
shouldn't I be?
Well you just lay there,
I'll let the cold in my veins,
While I follow you,
you treat me just the same as anyone,
Tell me trust, I know your secrets,
I don't lust, I hear your weaknesses,
I'm last then first to be directed,
I know souls don't get protected,
when their weak,
If your going away again,
I can't deny where my heart beats still,
keep my love entangled in your hair,
keep loving me will you?
so I won't be froze in air.
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Dear Erik,
This one is very special. The title alone draws us in. What was refreshing was to see the ingredients of this piece as non-traditional. I love the thought provoking questions throughout. You bear all in this. Also what was excellent was that you did not hold back from letting your feelings show and be known, all the while asking why, and lastly, asking to still be loved. that combination is tough, and you executed it beautifully. Even to express such pain, there is that component of supreme undying love. I am speechless. You always surprise us with your gift.
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Erik:
A heartfelt indepth poem, that brings your emotions to the surface and spills out the rawness of your soul.
In honesty that's what make us all who we are. and to share such a talent and thoughts, helps to become even better.
Thank you for sharing your heart with us.
Biography: Jacquii Cooke is a 32 year old Black Poet from Oak Ridge, Tennessee. As Webmistress of Poetry in Color Forum, she is devoted to the more abstract styles, especially those with a strong feminine voice that center around the topic of redemption and righting the wrongs of past transgressions.
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WHOA - what an AWESOME write ERIK - Not entirely what I expected at all after reading the title - perhaps the optional description is imperative lol - But really...
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Tell me why do your lies sit in the shade?
who gave them the right to be,
so comfortably killing me,
I'm not being vain,
asking just for some for me,
like I'm not included, feel so prostituted,
I'm fit for a grave,
This poem is about me - I know it - such strength in the words - telling of such "hard" pain - yet the tone is not a bitter one - just matter-of-fact. The lines I quote above - seems like desperation is being embraced. "I'm fit for a grave" is probably one of the most powerful sentences in all of poetry - You amaze with your willingness to push the envelope.
Amazing write - and since it IS about me (I swear it is... Well me and the soulmate I cannot see) I will just leave comments for the "interior" of the poem --- Powerful write ERIK - enjoyed this poem immensely - Kinda made me blush secretly.... With knowing...
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well msJ I did think somewhat it was about you,
from what I know, your living avatars getting quite pretty,
msJ thats very nice of you, your comments are so uplifting,
I'm glad you liked my poems that much,
this poetry gig really is doing me well in the heart
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This one is very special. The title alone draws us in. What was refreshing was to see the ingredients of this piece as non-traditional. I love the thought provoking questions throughout. You bear all in this. Also what was excellent was that you did not hold back from letting your feelings show and be known, all the while asking why, and lastly, asking to still be loved. that combination is tough, and you executed it beautifully. Even to express such pain, there is that component of supreme undying love. I am speechless. You always surprise us with your gift. 
