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The minstrel and his harp
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The minstrel and his harp
Nimble fingers
making music ,
seductively lingering
over the expanse of her porcelaine skin .
Like a minstrel in devine oneness with his harp ,
delicately drumming ,
softly strumming ,
searching , probing , extracting melody
from the very deepest cores of her being .
Her lithe frame
set to motion ,
moving back and forth ,
creating ripples on a soft sea of blankets .
Like an instrument in the hands of a maestro
her whole and soul ,
surrendered to his touch ,
swaying ecstatically
to the rythm of his passionate play ,
consumed by the trance of his tunes .
Whilst the virgin rays
of the dawning sun
like natures strobelights
focus on ,
highlighting this concerto of devine love ....
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Hello Johnathon!
Wow, I really do like this poem of yours. I love the metaphors that you use (making music, fingers nimbly moving, ect) and I liked the unique concept of love making between these two people being like playing music and the movement of it and everything. One of my favorite lines was this one below:
moving back and forth ,
creating ripples on a soft sea of blankets .
The image of the blankets rippling like a soft sea was great to imagine and one of my favorites when I was reading your poem. Overall, I enjoyed the images, rhythm, concept of your poem, and everything about it. I just think this is a great seductive poem with beautiful images in it from the first line to the last. I'm definitely glad that I came across it. Thank you for sharing!
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Ah - Tis about the romance and seduction of she with ferocious appetite to be teased everso gently and ravished afterwards! Yep - I'm diggin this poem to JON - It's interesting really 'cause the harp to me presents such a mystical quality - and to have such a deliriously handsome man want to tweek my harp strings, so delicately as the one in your poem - makes me blush to think that such a thing could ever be reality.
There's a soft essense within your poem - But the the male is so very masculine. I like this insinuation of being in the Maestro's hands - so willingly seduced:
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Like an instrument in the hands of a maestro
her whole and soul ,
surrendered to his touch ,
swaying ecstatically
to the rythm of his passionate play ,
consumed by the trance of his tunes .
Nice write JON and again - you flap your poetic wings, once again stunning with a beautiful romanticism.
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BTW - I thought "minstral" was spelled with an "e" = minstrel
Which is a medieval poet and musician who sang or recited while accompanying himself on a stringed instrument...
So I googled the word minstral and interestingly enough - I found a definition on UrbanDictionary.com which is defined as another common word for a black guy --- And of course - for me personally - such a word presents no negative connotations.
So I suppose either spelling would work, but I do like the double-entendre and spicyness that's presented when I think of the Black guy being the seducer. Yep - Spicy!
