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Like they said let's make love not war!
You Rock My World War I
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Old 05-10-2008, 05:04 PM
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You Rock My World War I

My enemy
I know she’s somewhere
She’s got to be over these two hills
God I know we can take these hills
So I charge my way upward
These steep hill breasts
To find that they’re two eyes already dug in
Staring back at me
I swiftly put my head back between the crevasses of the hills
To keep my head from being blown off
Damn I’m outnumbered by Beauty
Loudly whistle to call my last two platoons
We going to have to flank her
I give the signal
My right platoon
My arm goes right
And my left platoon
My left arm goes left around her
We crawl like babies through thick jet black grassy savannah hair
Burned in the heat of the moment
Hastily we make it to her back
A trap! Where her Japanese insignia is painted there
It’s the Red Sun giving birth to a crimson rose of thorns
I’ve committed suicide
As she turns her forces face forward
I yell, “ATACK” whipping my knife out of my pants to cut her
But she catches the blade between her soft hands dulling it
Slaps me back like a shotgun into the burning grass
My left and right platoons are wiped out
My right arms barely moves
There’s no escape and I’m caught in the middle of the last two legs of her army
She taken me
Striking long dark red nails in my mouth to clamp my tongue from speech
Whispering what seems like English in my right ear
“No Scream boy!”
She lifts me up by my tongue closer
Laughing as she pulls down her zipper
Nails suddenly rips out of my tongue
Madly she licks my blood and saliva off like warm saki
Yanking my head backwards she re inserts the nails into my forehead
One by one the wounds sink in
The Reality sinks in
I’m not going to make it
As she has sticks one of breasts grenades in my mouth
To begin to suffocate me in her arms. I hold strong
Suck her breasts hard with my teeth to keep from losing my emotions like losing the pin
But it’s useless
My lips are snatched from her breast
By the nails driving my forehead back
My life, my love, my inhibitions release like a pin ripped rapidly out the grenade
And my body lies lifeless
Another casualty of war
Another casualty of love
As She blows my mind!
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Old 05-15-2008, 03:00 PM
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The title first captured my attention.. Very inventive
I must say, this isn't usually my sort of thing, but I loved reading this. Extremely well written and keeps the reader's attention throughout. The abstract imagery is just fantstic.
Nice work

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Woohoo! Now that's erotica! I enjoyed reading this, could see everything there and even laughed in a few places (hopefully where you intended me to laugh, lol). I found this erotic, yet funny, I was going to say romantic, well...yes...a little romantic, but so darned erotic!

You show, don't tell, what's going on and that makes it all the better!

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I Like The Style. Very Unique So To Say...


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Where death and grave are out of bound, Where joy and comfort, always found.

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