Patricia_Lynn

lol MsJacquii said this would be a great title...I agreed. Thank you MSJac


OK, here we go; I have been looking for a writing partner. I have one that I am sure of, possibly two. I wild imagination is good but someone good with words is a plus. In return, you'll get a partner that has a wild imagination, though the spelling is a bit poor. Oh, PS, my punctuation is not all that great either, lol....But I am always honest.
You will take credit for the work/book, get a percentage of all money and...lets not forget, the joy of breathing life into an excellent story. Below you will find a few different parts to two books. If you would, have a look, think about it and see what you can add, or improve.


Hysterical pounding at their door had Triton and Margaret sitting straight up in bed. Like lightening, Triton jumped out of bed and rushed to the door, flung it open. What greeted him caused panic to set in.
On the other side, stood Reinald, his first in command and most trusted friend. His clothes were saturated with blood and the left side of his cheek had a three-inch gash running crossed it.
“What in the name of Aries happened to you Reinald?”
“Three strangers attacked me while I slept My Lord, if it weren't’t for Roaden and his friends Smith and Jeremiah I’d be dead. We did manage to capture two of them, but the third one died in battle.”
When Margaret heard her oldest sons name mentioned, she quickly got out of bed, put her housecoat on and rushed to the door, “What was Roaden doing there? Is he all right?


Trev verily escaped his attackers, but not without a few battle scores of his own. Now he had to make it out of this place alive and try to figure out what was going on.
Why had those men tried to kill him? How did they know about his eccentric abilities?
The sound of a car close by, caught his attention, quickly, he ducked low and made his way closer, until the car came into view.
The hair on Trev’s body stood on edge as he sensed Butch, but that was impossible, Butch was dead.
When the sent become distinct, Trev felt his muscles tighten, all of his nerves felt alive and ready to explode. All of these years the bastard had been alive and rebuilding his army.
Trev sensed Butch closing in fast from behind him. He knew in his weakened state he didn’t stand a chance in hell and if he didn’t act fast, his life would be snuffed out.

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Heavy, desperate pounding at their door had Triton and his maiden, Margaret, sitting straight up in bed. As lightning clashes from the heavens, Triton dashed out of bed and flew to the door, flinging it open. What greeted him caused deep, sullen fear to set in.
On the other side, stood a very disheveled Reinald, his first in command and most trusted friend. His clothes were saturated with blood, his eyes gave the impression he hadn't slept in days, his leggings were torn, and the left side of his cheek had a three-inch gash running across it.
“What in the name of Aries happened to you, Reinald?” Triton asked his friend in fearful disbelief.
“Three bandits attacked me while I slept M'lord, if it weren't for Roaden and his companions, Smith and Jeremiah, I’d be dead. We did manage to capture two of the bloody scoundrels, but as Roaden fought him with his rapier, he unintentionally opened the guy's stomach. All of his entrails spilled out and he would have died a slow, painful death if not for the mercy of Jeremiah's broadsword decapitating him."
When Margaret heard her oldest son's name mentioned, she quickly got out of bed, put her housecoat on and rushed to the door, “What was Roaden doing there? Is he all right?" she asked in a voice enveloped with fear.
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That would be my version of your story...just a tad more detail...more olden language...and a lil bit more graphic...urs was totally great tho... I loved the whole idea of it...i'll have to post something really extreme of mine...see what u can do with it...prolly not tonite...or maybe....again...excellent starts....and i'll talk to u soon i believe.
Ed

Patricia_Lynn

Okay, I would like to give it a try. This book so far only has seven pages and it is all broke up. On paper, I have about three more pages. I wont be doing a lot over the next day or two...not until I get over my little problem. ON the 20th, I will be heading to Fl for a week. I will make sure to send you some of it to keep you busy. I will probably be able to get most of the first chapter/prologue done before I do go. If you want to work together on this book, I need to know how you would like to go about it. Let me know Ed

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