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Birthday Gift
Birthday Gift
Belle is a beautiful child with innocence as sweet as honeysuckle. Her mother boasts how Belle, at only ten years old, is completely captivated by the allure of the ocean. Fortunately, they live beside the ocean and Belle couldn’t be happier. The rocks, the scents, the sounds, the movement of the water, all are simply magical to her.
Being challenged, Belle’s mother teaches her about the world around her and how to do things by making lists. Belle reads, learns, and follows instructions on the lists with all her heart and soul.
Today is Belle’s birthday. She is so excited and can't wait to read what her mother plans for her on her birthday list! Following the list with all her heart and soul, Belle got up early, bathed, put on her new crimson dress, put a matching colored bow in her beautiful red hair, put on her new shoes, walked to her favorite rock overlooking the ocean, and jumped.
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Wooowww!!! How an ending, Ms. Kim!! I did not expect this kind of ending... Did Belle try to dive into the water or make a demostration, or what else??... Was her action a Birthday gift for her mother, dear??...
I am not sure, whether I have clearly understood Belle´s purpose for her jump into the ocean from a high rock. You might clear my doubts. Anyway, I like your story!!
Thank you, Ms. Kim, for sharing your remarkable talents!! You are indeed, an amazing writer and poetess.
Cordially,
Starry.
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Thank you Ms Starry for taking time to read and to comment! Yes....the mother was horrid and mean (though she portrayed to love Belle and boast about her, but really wanted to kill her), and she did not want Belle anymore...she wanted to kill her...but wanted it to look like an accident. Belle being challenge and learning disabled...Belle's mother took advantage of that and Belle was home schooled and learned best from reading and following instructions on lists. Belle's mother made her a Birthday list to follow which at the end instructed Belle to jump off the rock...killing her....thus....looking like an accident.
Oh, Ms. Kim!! How sad!!...Poor Belle!! I never thought that your story had this sad ending. A good mother should love her daughter. I guess, this was not the case.
Anyway, thank you, Ms. Kim, for sharing your work with us!!
Cordially,
Starry.
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Originally Posted by erikestabrook
pretty awesome story,
It might've been tragic,
the mother caused the child to do that,
but the way this story developed was great
Thank you so much Erik for taking precious time to read and comment. I value your reviews highly and I am pleased you like this one. I have more coming as well, with lots of twists. Thank you again and I will be commenting on your awesome "Emerse Me In September!"
WOW didnt see that coming why did she jump it didnt seem like she was sad this is a magnificent mystery Painted I loved it cant wait for more to be written to get questions answered
hugs kisses
bear
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Dear Bear,
Thank you sooooo much Bear for taking precious time to read and comment. I am getting the reaction I wanted which is always good. Yes, I believe I explained in the Chatbox. Working on more, and thanks again. Much love to ya!
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