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Old 09-23-2007, 11:22 AM
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Celestial; You and I

This poems fairly new, wrote it not that long ago ^^ Got bored so i posted it =| I can't help the boredom! D:

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Beams of radiance,
Dimly reflected off the dark clouds,
Pure souls glistening across the sky,
With a harmonic melody they intertwine,

Heavy atmospheric pressure,
Bearing down like chains,
Celestial winds come rushing forth,
Uplifting the mood,

Pastel lights, illuminate the Heavens,
Show casing awe-inspiring movements,
Moonlight pulling the strings of the Ocean,
Like a puppet it comes forth and recedes,

Solitary shores,
Lack nothing but life,
Flowering meadows abandoned,
Wither and become lackluster,

Endless rain; blazing heat,
Create havoc of epic proportions,
When the human element is not in play,
The world is at its ultimate dismay,

Color in finely, the missing piece,
Let the Heavens rain down life,
Shores beat with a living melody,
Lackluster meadows bloom,

You create ripples upon a lake,
Hand in hand; you rest your head upon his,
Pure souls take their turn glowing,
You and I; balancing out life once more.
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Old 09-23-2007, 11:19 PM
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Gosh Riha,
This is fantastic. Your writing is so mature. Keep on writing everyday and never give up. You have a so much talent already, I can only imagin what your writing will be in another ten years.

This is one of my favorite parts:

" Moonlight pulling the strings of the Ocean,
Like a puppet it comes forth and recedes,"



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Lovely ...... just sheer loveliness... the pictures it shows... very well done Riha

thank you for an awesome read.

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wonderfully descriptive write Riha you have an awesome talent
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Riha, what a beautifully written work! Visual to the end...so very beautiful. Great work!
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Very descriptive and lively elements on display...lovely!

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Gosh Riha,
This is fantastic. Your writing is so mature. Keep on writing everyday and never give up. You have a so much talent already, I can only imagin what your writing will be in another ten years.

This is one of my favorite parts:

" Moonlight pulling the strings of the Ocean,
Like a puppet it comes forth and recedes,"
I second the motion.....beautiful indeed Riha. Thank you for sharing!

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