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Old 07-18-2008, 09:34 AM
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A Date With Loneliness~

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~A DATE WITH LONELINESS~

Sitting in a little
café sipping cappuccino,
her heart reflected
in steamy curls is as blue as
the sky in the old
Van Gough painting that
hangs crooked on
the wooden style wall.

With loneliness her
only company as fat flakes
silently fall painting
winter on the charcoal canvas
of night she fishes in her
purse for her pen and

pad of paper she carries
with her like a little girl and
her blankie and she begins
writing a conversation
poem to ease the lack of chatter.

Midway through the poem,
laughter of the little
old couple sitting at the corner
table catches her senses
and a single tear rolls down
her cheek splashing the word love

on her paper and she makes
a wish, like a school girl, on
that tear for a love filled with
length and laughter much like that
little old couple believing
that just maybe wishes do come true.

The clock on the brown
wall ticks eight o'clock as she
bleeds the last word,
picks herself up dressing winter

to match the crisp night air
and shuffles to her car
leaving loneliness at
the bottom of her empty cup.

© January 15, 2006 Karen Davies



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Old 07-18-2008, 09:59 PM
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Heyy...did you pull that one out of my soul? This piece evokes emotions about solitude I haven't felt for a while. Sometimes it just seems to close around you. Captured very well indeed.
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great emotional penning moonchild loneliness is the most terrrible thing a person can go through, I know Ive been there. AND during that time I wrote the most saddest poems ever thats why I dont like to read or write them now.this is a beautifully written masterpiece
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Thank you so much Deb and yes it does
seem to wrap around the soul sometimes.
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Thank you Bear and yes it is
I know I've been there too and sorry you have too*hugs*
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This is awesome Moonchild, the emotion of this write is damn near tangible. I'm going to look in every cup I have now maybe I can find my lost love. Great work
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Karen...again, you deliver to us a beautiful, haunting heart-jerker...I could see myself in the poem, as I'm sure many people can. Been there done that...good thing I like my own company...lol! I love your poems!

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Karen, this is just a beautiful write and I definitely believe that this is a write that everyone can relate to. I remember seeing an older couple just recently which were adorable together and I felt the same way, not exactly lonliness, but longing of having something like that. I love the last stanza as well and I just think that it wraps up your poem very nicely.

I really do enjoy reading your works and I could relate to this write and enjoyed the imagery of it. I always carry around a little book to write out poems when the mood strikes me so I could even relate to this too. So, altogether I'm glad I came across this poem of yours and thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Anywho, thank you for sharing and keep on writing away!



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