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Freedom
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Freedom
I am no poet, I just read one of erikestabrook's poems (Let Me Pretend), and I was inspired to try to express myself in poetry.
Freedom
pretences, pretences,
people do a lot of this
yet how can I be naive?
the path traveled by friends,
teeming with laughter
teeming with sadness
today, i look back
today, i have come out of the shell
my naivete has gotten the best of me
no more pretences!
no more naivete!
I am free...
am i really?
time can heal
and my time, has yet to come.
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Hiya CTIVNAN - Thanx for posting this poem - I like it. The tone is an optimistic one especially reading the last stanza - It seems you say "Freedom's close - but yeah it will come."
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am i really?
time can heal
and my time, has yet to come.
Yeah - I like the optimistic outlook that the healing will come.
Thanx for the sharing
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Dear ctivnan,
I think your first poem speaks volumes. It comes from deep within and the positivity is fluid throughout. I like the message you convey in the brevity of the poem and it tells a story...your story...alittle about you and / or your experience. I too like the value of hope as your outcome. Great job dear poet! Erik does inspire the best in us.
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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary
Dear ctivnan,
I think your first poem speaks volumes. It comes from deep within and the positivity is fluid throughout. I like the message you convey in the brevity of the poem and it tells a story...your story...a little about you and / or your experience. I too like the value of hope as your outcome. Great job dear poet! Erik does inspire the best in us.
Painted
Hi PD!
Thanks very much! It is my experience about friendship and in spite of all that has happened, there are still good friends out there!
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