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Old 10-31-2006, 02:18 AM
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Lunch Bucket
Lunch bucket sits dusty-
in exile after greed
drowned common sense
when the plant closed-
contents unchanged within
but not forgotten by its owner.

Remembering clearly-
7:30am found them mute
standing before the entry
to what gave each existence-
the empty faces of disbelief
that would pass to a wife.

Halloween came early-
no treat to be sought out
in the trick served them
that cold October morn-
Christmas brought few gifts
for his twenty year devotion.

In that dusty lunch box-
held proudly everyday
in hands by which pride
honestly believed-
lay one peanut butter sandwich
under a note that read, 'I love you!'.
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Old 10-31-2006, 05:05 AM
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This was Awesome! This is one that I can really relate to!

I do put notes in my husband's lunch box and the guys he works with have told me that when he doesn't get one, he's a bear to work with!

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This was SCARY - any poem with the words "Halloween" AND "Christmas" within such proximety (sp?) of each other inspires a dread not known to many in this wonderland we like to call "Down South"

Excellent use of "trick" though

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Briliant! Superb! Bravo!
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The sandwhich was old, but the note was fresh as the day it was wrote - and the sentiment to go with it.
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'Lunch Bucket' is written with the insight, inspiration and understanding only felt by one who has been there. I was able to read in the same context. I've saw that look on my wifes face in 1981. Two small children added to the urgency of a holiday season coming... and absolutely no prospects. Your poem is well written and expresses somber emotions that lay with despair.

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Wow, i've never read a poem that had both Christmas and Halloween in it :O

I don't think i quite get this poem though *dammit!* T^T
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if you aint the sweetest thing. lol this is good stuff. I love stuff that gives inanimate objects a heart and life of their own with their own story to tell. i miss you my friend, i really do.

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