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Originally Posted by nomadicrhymer
picturing its young captain
that 30-foot haven of love
it used to be.
His quicksilver grin
energized the thousands
of fireflies circling her heart
lifting it up and up and up
above life
mere everyday life
forgotten
Heaven is where
she found herself
for just those few
sizzling summer months
that flew by
on wings of love
she saw his smile flash
through the murky window
of the small plane…promising
his return
swearing undying love
forever
he said
forever
nothing would keep him away
except
he didn’t foresee
the hand of God
swooping down
like catching a hummingbird
stopped midflight
the plane was lost
never seen again
pilot nor passenger
was it still in
The Bermuda Triangle
she wondered
was it time to let go
paint anew her heart
and boat?
Was it time
to live again
to stop
sitting there
dangling her feet
off the edge
of the pier,
wistfully.
© nomadicrhymer
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Therese...girl...this is amazing! First I love the title...as I was filled already with wanting to know what or who was longing, what for, or for who? So you had me from the beginning! I must have read this five times..not because it was difficult, but because this is such a beautifully woven piece...I want more!
The language is just stunning...painting a tale of lore, magic, mysticism, at sea love, etc. I could almost see and taste the sea salts airbrushing the wind and rocks. The melancholy mood and pinkish grey clouds, her hair blowing in the wind, and her mind still blown from the memory. Well....that's the painting I have in my head. The unfolding of this storem (story + poem) is just flawless and beautiful. You do have a way with telling a story and structuring the words just (write)..lol...for maximum impact!
I could feel her longing, her dilemma, her memories, her pain, her wanting to come back to face a destiny uncontrolled , yet she has immediate control to move on...but will she? We don't know yet...as we come to the end that is just masterful, to match the beginning...after all, that is how she started out...
sitting there
dangling her feet
off the edge
of the pier,
wistfully.
Just

I love love love sea poems, sea mysteries, and lost loves at sea...like Titanic...one of my favorites! This is definitely going into my favorites Therese and thank you thank you thank you for letting me know of your new piece here!
Love this dahling! Kim...

