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A Writer's Quill
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Masterfully written Mysty, I wish my quill could write so well.
Umm...is it hot in here or is it just me? Dang, Mysty! I want that quill! Please, pretty please? lol.
Really, I liked this poem. The image of a quill drawing characters with ink, interspersed with, umm, other images (are you sure it's not hot in here?) which are also clear in an opaque, stay outta here, kinda way, is entertaining to say the least.
Plots thicken as blood settles
to pool where society's taboos...
You, ummm, caught my attention with those lines, lol.
Something else caught my attention...for someone's mute, lonely eyes. (just a suggestion)
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Umm...is it hot in here or is it just me? Dang, Mysty! I want that quill! Please, pretty please? lol.
Really, I liked this poem. The image of a quill drawing characters with ink, interspersed with, umm, other images (are you sure it's not hot in here?) which are also clear in an opaque, stay outta here, kinda way, is entertaining to say the least.
Plots thicken as blood settles
to pool where society's taboos...
You, ummm, caught my attention with those lines, lol.
Something else caught my attention...for someone's mute, lonely eyes. (just a suggestion)
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Hiya Gail so hot in here I am going nuts lol. I think the devil's she mistress musta been whispering in my ear the night I wrote and posted this ..... should I perhaps move it too the adult section? Am glad you liked this and I incorporated your suggestion. Thank You
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Wow, this is amazing, Mysty, I love it! I love the sensualness of it (like Gail was saying, is it hot in here? lol.) Definitely very hot and I think it's great the metaphor of you being the Quill, I think this is original and also a strong metaphor as well. I really like how you end it as well restating what you said in the beginning. Anywho, thanks for sharing, and keep on writing away!
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so hot in here I am going nuts lol. I think the devil's she mistress 
musta been whispering in my ear the night I wrote and posted this ..... should I perhaps move it too the adult section? Am glad you liked this and I incorporated your suggestion. Thank You 
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