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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Hugh, Apr 20, 2007.



    Hugh New Member

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    Eyes closed
    heart pounding
    temples throbbing
    tossing
    dreaming, awake
    I tumble down
    to my open window
    look out at the night sky
    the stars, flashing
    I drift out amongst them
    a dying light
    straining to be seen
    struggling to breathe
    buried by this fog
    this sickening sensation
    this myopic vision
    I can't see
    I can't think
    I can't sleep.

    succumbing
    to these odd days
    i've slipped
    into my past
    into that man
    into what I left behind
    sorrowful, saddened
    scars bright
    pink light
    misplaced
    dispersed
    misused
    so sad
    so confused
    so tired of sleeping
    and dying for something else,
    for something real...

    Take care, Hugh


    Posted By Hugh | Apr 20, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Some stylin going on here, Hugh! See, it's not just me...I like both the cadence of the words and the emotions behind them...they really pull the reader into the frustration. lol! been there...done that...but mine is usually around 2:15AM.

    Love this piece! :hooray:

    Nomad :kicking:
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    :wow: HUGH - this is a bit different from the style I'm used to seeing from you. This is more of a rapid fire approach; a staccato of sorts with the use of one- & two-word lines. This poem to me speaks of not MISplacement but DISplacement

    Seems a sad song that's being played HUGH - what it do?
    Interesting share from you. What inspires this write?

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 22, 2007
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