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Discussion in 'Emotional Romantic' started by Tanax, Apr 26, 2007.



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    The first one is in swedish, I will post a translation aswell, but the english version of it doesn't sound as good. Also, it rhymes in swedish.

    It has no name yet, so I'll just write what language it is instead of the name.

    SWEDISH:

    Mitt liv var pest och pina,
    bara gud vet hur det var.
    Gud tog ifrån mig alla vänner mina,
    tills det inte var några kvar.

    Kanske var det ödet, kanske var det otur,
    men jag mådde så dåligt på ett sätt, jag vet inte hur,
    och jag drömde om någon som skulle rädda mig.
    Inte visste jag då, att jag drömde om dig.

    Du kom från ovan, änglalikt,
    du hjälpte mig att må bra,
    och tog bort alla berg jag någonsin bestigt.
    Inte visste jag då, att det skulle bli vi två en da'.

    För nu har gud min dröm besannat,
    du har räddat mig Linn.
    Och jag vill inget annat,
    än att vara för evigt din.



    ENGLISH:

    My life was miserable and sad,
    only god knows how it was.
    God took away all my friends,
    until there was noone left.

    Maybe it was fate, maybe it was bad luck,
    but I felt so bad, I don't know how.
    I dreamed of someone who would save me from this,
    I didn't know then, that I dreamt of you.

    You came from above, like an angel,
    you helped me feel good,
    and took away all the mountains I've climed.
    I didn't know then, that it would be "we" one day.

    Cause now has god my dream fulfilled,
    for you have saved me Linn.
    And I don't want anything else,
    than to be yours forever.



    As I said, it sounds really lame in english, but trust me, it sounds very good in swe.

    Anyways, I said there was 2 poems, and here's the other.
    It's written in english, so.. :)

    NO MATTER WHAT:

    I can't describe how wonderful you are,
    you mean the world to me.
    When you smile, you shine like a star,
    and there's nowhere else I would rather be,
    than with you.

    Beautiful, sexy, lovely, and handsome,
    they don't do you justice.
    For you are so much more than any word of those.
    I wish that you would to me come,
    to share even a single kiss,
    and to give you a red rose.

    So that you will know,
    that no matter what you do,
    I will always love you.


    Please comment :)


    Posted By Tanax | Apr 26, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Tanax - You know, this reads like a song…very passionate and full of emotion…I can almost hear the pain! If I sounds better in Swedish is it because of the sounds of the words, or because of flow and the beat?


    “NO MATTER WHAT” is also very flowery and passionate…and seems to be the poem to the male counterpart? Very nicely done…these two!

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    Thank you :)
    I think it sounds better because of both... it's better flow, and it sounds better ;)

    Actually, both of them are written from me, to her :)

    Thank you for your kind comment :)


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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey TANAX :wavey: - Longtime no see - Glad to see you posting poetries - but next time post one poem per thread please ;)

    So anyway.... I kinda like the English version of the 1st poem - It's written true and heartfelt - Linn must be really special. It is an ode to beauty and for the truth of love - Perhaps you've found it? :)

    The 2nd poem is quite nice as well. Very nice sharing!
    Thanx,

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Apr 26, 2007
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    Tanax Member

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    Hellu :D Yea, I know.. busy with school :(
    Ok, sorry , won't do again :)

    Indeed she is :) Thank you :) I hope I found it, it sure feels so.. :D


    Thanks for the comment :)


    Posted By Tanax | Apr 26, 2007
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