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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    A Breaking Heart

    My heart is breaking
    for I am losing
    a brother,
    a son,
    a father,
    an uncle.

    My heart is breaking
    for my husband
    is my rock
    a strong shoulder
    to cry on
    for those comforting words.

    My heart is breaking
    for I don't know
    how to comfort
    my parents
    myself
    or my kids.

    My heart is broken.


    Posted By crazymamma5 | May 1, 2008
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    Ok, you've brought more than one tear to my eyes. So beautiful, Racheul! I knew you had it in you. It's so bad it was triggered by such a tragic situation!

    This is so beautiful and poignant! I actually cried when reading it. The raw emotions you are feeling really comes through in your words!

    hugs,
    Grammy Gail


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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    Thank you! Every time I read it I cry and can't believe it came to me while I was in the shower. I love your new signature.


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    Thanks, I borrowed it off the email you sent me, thought it was so beautiful!
    Grammy Gail


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    You have written a heartbreaking poem about the loss of a special person to many varied parts of a family, and the inability to deal with it...very well done crazymamma!

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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    thank you so much nomad! the thing is he is not gone yet and not sure what will happen now. this was wrote to reflect my feelings that i have been dealing with because of what is going on with my brother. i wrote an essay about him also called rob.


    Posted By crazymamma5 | May 9, 2008
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    Hello!

    This is a beautiful poem with the pure and intense emotions with reading it. I can relate to your poem even though I haven't lost many people myself... and I think that it's a wonderful thing when you can personally relate to a poem that you read. I think that you did a great job and I enjoyed reading it!


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    crazymamma5 angelic mamma

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    thank you so much for your comments. that is what i wanted to get across that way no matter whether you have experienced it or not the emotions would come across enough to feel it inside your self.

    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    Life's a B... & Then you Die!

    We'll I like to say I'm the pimp of my B. So I at least get a little control of things. I think you have a lot of heart just from all the roles you play. A Mother, A Wife, & A supporter of your parents. Wow!

    booobooo Welcome To SAM's World

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    Why Do You Think he Is No More...He Is Right There...You Only need To See Him...With Those Eyes...That God Gave You...Not Man...


    He Is There...He Is There...


    Posted By booobooo | May 16, 2008
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    I think this is the first poem I ever read by you. But I loved it. That is a lot of people to lose/be losing around the same time, I can see why it would be so heartbreaking and tragic. This poem is such pure true emotion it bought a tear to my eye... I really enjoyed the read though.

    Thank you for sharing
    And keep up the great work!

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