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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    The sky is churning, rumbling today
    though I can't understand what its trying to say

    blue sky to my eye is now pale grey

    maybe its a warning of winters chill
    and bad times near,
    for in it I still wander like a reckless child


    the first dusting of snow
    like delicate powdered sugar
    drifts its way to land on fresh faces

    the snow floats to my window
    like little white pixies
    climbing on the wind

    I haven't forgotten how surprises come,
    so much after times where none came to appear

    and I cherish every blessing far and near.

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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    I liked this stanza best ERIK, as it really epitomizes the title of "Bustle in the Air" --- it gives the poem or more light feel, whereas the warning in the 3rd stanza made me cringe a bit, as I've always liked the winter season, it's special to me actually, especially when the snow falls --- It just automatically gives me a feeling of familiarity and warmth...

    At anyrate - I like how you tied the poem up with blessings. A nice write = Thanx for sharing it with us!

    Jacquii.

    ps - is the snow stickin' in VA - I bet it's just beautiful!


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Dec 5, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    yeah msJ some of the snows sticking,

    I love snow too msJ,
    glad my poem wasn't that bad

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    Erik...well done! Snow makes me sit back and think also....


    Posted By Benny | Dec 22, 2007
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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    thanks Benny

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    Greetings to you Erik:

    As I sit here in the chilly morning, I see white flakes of new snow swirling about. Which makes your lovely poem in tune with my wintery scene right through my frosted window.
    What a splendid way to begin my day.

    Thanks for sharing

    Blessings

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    cool thats what I saw too

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