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    A Dark Fairy tale

    As I was chained, I breathe in.
    As I was burned, I breathe out.
    As I was cut, I looked down.
    As I was broken, I looked up.
    As I was destroyed, I closed away.
    I had killed myself damaging beyond any repair.

    To keep myself closed I chain, cut, burned, and destroyed what was within me, isolation my fear around me. But suddenly as I had nearly been kindled to a shivering light, something braver and stronger then I appeared and took me and held me and once again I was fixed and this is what happened;

    Suddenly I breathed in as I was unchained.
    Suddenly I breathed out as my burns disappeared.
    Suddenly I looked up as my broken body mended.
    Suddenly I looked down as my cuts faded.
    Suddenly I was opened up and my destruction was nothing more then a dream
    As my knight, you entered that shadow and held me now I grow with a profane radiance.

    I was held once more, and my soul emerged.
    I was spoken to once more, and my mind went blank.
    I was kissed and my body reacted without a second hesitation.
    And before I could run away once more, I was trapped.

    Unlike my prison I lived in a fairy tale, in were I don’t want to live this place anytime soon. What happened then and what happening now are so fair apart it hilarious.
    I've forgiven the past, not forgotten it. Prove never to make the same mistakes or else be locked back inside that tower I call my mind.

    Let me in brave knight, into your mysterious ways.
    Let me in brave knight let me have secret passages into that world of yours.
    Let me in brave knight so I can truly capture you.
    I was as cold as ice even more then winters hail, but you with a ridged past that icier then I could have imagined is as warm as the summer sun and sweet like spring air.
    For saving me, for taking my heart, for releasing me, I’ll become everything you want and then more, I’ll stand by your side and hold you like you held me and I shall be everything you need.
    My sweet Knight.
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    Posted By Wind | Jan 16, 2013
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    Minellis'Vertigo Member

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    Hi Wind
    I like how in your poem you use very physical words to portray emotion and feeling. It made it interesting for me reading it. I also like how the first and second verses interact with each other, watching the poem progress and unfold.
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    Wind WindXSaul

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    Oh thank you. I plan to make more of these seeing how this one i enjoyed writing the most


    Posted By Wind | Jan 22, 2013
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    JONATHAN living not existing.

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    I totally love this one, its strong, hard hitting and fascinating so much so that I would like to get into your mind .. lovely write and Im gonna read it some more ... Bravo!


    Posted By JONATHAN | Jan 24, 2013
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    Wind WindXSaul

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    My mind ..... well... words that I write..come from there...so I'm speaking what on my mind. And thank you for reading
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    Posted By Wind | Jan 24, 2013
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey Wind. You've done a good job with this poem actually. I like the emotions you evoke here:

    Perhaps it is for the knight to rescue you, but you are no shrinking violet. You're no damsel in distress, for you offer him loyalty in trade for those secret passages which inevitably make you stronger for...love, for life. A dark fairy tail you've written. I am glad you didn't end it with "happily ever after" LOL

    You're getting better with you poetic process and the intention, the radiance does shine through. I wonder though, what inspired this poem? Anyway - Keep it up and thanks for the share ;)

    J.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Jan 27, 2013
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    Mysty JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    Wow Wind this is one beautiful Fairy Tale indeed. I quite enjoyed the way this poem progressed. I especially liked this stanza:

    "To keep myself closed I chain, cut, burned, and destroyed what was within me, isolation my fear around me. But suddenly as I had nearly been kindled to a shivering light, something braver and stronger then I appeared and took me and held me and once again I was fixed and this is what happened;

    Suddenly I breathed in as I was unchained.
    Suddenly I breathed out as my burns disappeared.
    Suddenly I looked up as my broken body mended.
    Suddenly I looked down as my cuts faded.
    Suddenly I was opened up and my destruction was nothing more then a dream
    As my knight, you entered that shadow and held me now I grow with a profane radiance.


    Thank you for sharing :)


    Posted By Mysty | Jan 28, 2013
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    Wind WindXSaul

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    First...there is a reason for these poem. But thank you


    Posted By Wind | Feb 1, 2013
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    I don't understand your information.Please explaine your topic clearly..........


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    Wind WindXSaul

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    It was a gift, or something like that. But it doesn't hold any sentimental value.As it once did....Just like it says it's a fairytale, only with I suppose a very twisted meaning....Who'd be happy from leaving one place that ensued hate into their heart..just for another?


    Posted By Wind | Jul 3, 2013
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    Sounds great for me, I am interested in such type of tails... This dark fairy tail one of my most favorite
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    Wind WindXSaul

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    >w< Thank you! I loved this when I wrote it. ^^


    Posted By Wind | Oct 12, 2013
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