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    A Day In The Life Of…….

    It silently crept into position downwind
    Crouching on all fours; creeping with skill
    Teeth bared, ears back as if pinned
    Knowing in time blood will spill

    Crouching on all fours; creeping with skill
    Waiting in the grass, it can hear its own heart
    Knowing in time blood will spill
    Adrenaline flowing, the chase will soon start

    Waiting in the grass, it can hear its own heart
    Its blood is pounding with passion for the run
    Adrenaline flowing, the chase will soon start
    Just a little closer, when its eyes are in the sun

    Its blood is pounding with passion for the run
    Now’s its chance, it’s completely unaware
    Just a little closer, when its eyes are in the sun
    It’s off like a shot – birds act as flares

    Now’s its chance, it’s completely unaware
    It tears towards its prey running full speed
    It’s off like a shot – birds act as flares
    Its timing is crucial, it needs to feed

    It tears towards its prey running full speed
    Hearing the birds; knowing its plight
    Its timing is crucial, it needs to feed
    The prey runs away in total fright

    Hearing the birds; knowing its plight
    The little one is faster; he’s getting away
    The prey runs away in total fright
    The hunter chases on in utter dismay

    The little one is faster; he’s getting away
    The tiger is tiring, slowing to a trot
    The hunter chases on in utter dismay
    The prey is still running, he never got caught

    The tiger is tiring, slowing to a trot
    Finding new prey, completely chagrined
    The prey is still running, he never got caught
    It silently creeps into position downwind


    Posted By lasher | Mar 20, 2007
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  2. Artistic

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    Dear lasher,

    :wow: This was phenomenal!! You placed me there in the middle of the action. I felt like I was on a safari and filming this survival of the fittest. I love the way use use each 2nd line in each stanza, as the first line for the next stanza. To keep the flow, and rhythm, and adventure was quite masterful!!! I even tries to come up with a stanza using the 2nd line of your last stanza. Tis quite addictive, lol. At any rate, fantabulous write my friend!!!! Just breath-taking!

    {{{~~**KIM**~~}}}:)

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    Dang! Love this style of poetry! Very well done...very!


    Posted By Benny | Apr 8, 2007
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