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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by lanaia74, Feb 13, 2007.



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    I hope I look really special to you tonight
    As I have planned something really special for you
    Our future together looked very bright
    As you told me your love for me was true.

    I haven even taken the time to cook you a very special meal
    Wanting to show my appreciation of your love for me
    I want to show you exactly how you make me feel
    To show you our love for each other was meant to be.

    I finally hear an anticipated knock on my door
    I open the door, you walk in,lean over and kiss me
    To feel love for you is not a hard chore
    No one else will ever have you, see.

    Everything about this night has to be precise
    So you have no idea about the surprise I have in store for you
    I even have a chilled bottle of champagne which I use to entice
    I pour you a drink, very carefully dropping the arsenic in,
    this will make your minutes very few.

    We say cheers, take a drink, then you fall to the floor
    Looking at me wide eyed and gasping for breath you ask why
    Seeing you in the arms of another I felt rage like never before
    Remember I said" No one else would ever have you" then I watch you die.


    Posted By lanaia74 | Feb 13, 2007
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    Yikes.. your not to be
    messed with,

    Yet she was my sister!!

    Nice write.... thanks for
    the read.


    Posted By Jeez | Feb 13, 2007
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    Very nice read, i loved the play up on the sinister. Great write!

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    Good write! I think this has been every woman's fantasy at some time or another!


    Posted By Altree94 | Feb 14, 2007
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