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    I.Unrest

    In dark of night, light of day
    Time rapidly slips away.
    Flowing along river to sea
    Constant its path to eternity.
    Lost in thought, wondering why
    Is existence only live then die?

    II.Disillusion

    When I was young
    Innocent and naive
    Many things were
    Taught to perceive.
    Power and money
    Keys to them all.
    Without we are nothing,
    Pitiful, weak and small.

    I followed the masses
    Ignored the voice,
    Deep inside
    My spirit, a choice.
    Forgotten dreams,
    Silenced imagination.
    Exchanged for lust
    Prejudice, greed and frustration.
    Dismissed a notion
    Of something more up above.
    Stripped away feelings
    Deadened my capacity to love.

    Now having reached their higher plane
    Is it associated with only loneliness and pain?

    I am not I
    Having become them,
    Appearing the same
    Inside I pretend.

    III.Despair

    Alone, lost and cold
    Apprehension, growing old.
    Towering concrete gods
    As far as I can see.
    Standing forever,
    Why not me?
    People pass so goes life.
    Feeling no happiness
    Only pain and strife.
    Having become all things
    Taught to be key,
    So dark, this realm
    My tortured reality.
    Cold at heart,
    Lost is my soul.
    Filled with disdain
    Never to be whole.
    All good I traded
    For vanity and pride
    Only to become
    My conflict inside.
    .

    IV. Enlightenment

    Then it came,
    A flash of light.
    Streaks of lightning
    In heat of the night.
    Sense of knowing,
    Perhaps from a Dream.
    Sudden insight
    To a crazy scheme.
    I saw the earth
    Wind and sky.
    A snow white dove
    Glide silently by.
    No matter what race
    Age,color or creed,
    We all are blessed
    With the same burning need.
    An urge to know
    Experience and touch.
    A growing obsession
    Within each of us.
    It is not how long
    Just how you spend.
    There is no beginning
    That leads to an end.

    VI. Inner Peace

    I sat upon the edge,
    At the river's bank.
    Deep within
    Slowly I sank.
    Soon comes my death
    I no longer am afraid
    For it is from me
    That all is made.
    I am earth
    Wind and sky,
    Though my body may not live
    My spirit shall never die...

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    semcgl


    Posted By semcgl | Oct 12, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Ah = Spiritual growth! I like this poem SEMCGL - I love the way there's the actually visual presence of growth in your poem - Like chapters of ones life or something similar, perhaps the steps that it has taken one to be 100% comfortable in the skin of humanity... (if that even makes a bit of sense...)

    At anyrate - very visually appealing poem - the unforced rhyme just flows natural in this work:

    Dismissed a notion
    Of something more up above.
    Stripped away feelings
    Deadened my capacity to love.

    Just a suggestion if I may... This line in the 2nd "chapter" is really nice - I would have liked to see it repeated in the end, in essense bringing the pieces together... I think it would've been really fabulous to see a play on words with those lines (ala: deepened my capacity for love ---> or something similar)

    All in all - I am really enjoying this poem - Thanx very much for sharing it with us!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Oct 13, 2006
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    lanaia74 New Member

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    VERY well done!


    Posted By lanaia74 | Oct 31, 2006
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    semcgl New Member

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    Sorry

    [IMG]Ty for the comments and I am sorry for not replying sooner. My old comp finally locked up completely but now I am up and running with this new one. Ty for your time. :) SEM:meeting:


    Posted By semcgl | Nov 3, 2006
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    Intricate soul intricate soul

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    Really liked this, especially the ending. One shouldn't fear death, the quiet after the storm I think of it as.

    My best regards Intricate soul

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    well i'm not to the river bank yet, but its odd seeing the stages of life on paper and remembering them. i liked what you did with breaking this up into smaller poems, but kept the flow. nice work

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 25, 2007
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    You know...it is not death worthy of our fear, rather living poorly and missing what life there is for us. It is ironic how long it takes us to come around to some kind of understanding we can live with before we can really see life for what it is...a gift. Once we open that gift we wind up opening it daily and find things we missed the frist go round...


    Posted By Benny | Mar 4, 2007
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