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    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    from hemmed up wounds and clueless views,
    I've hit that spark that starts anew,
    a new me is coming filling the air with pride,
    a dangerous assumption that I am like the tide,
    A new view has risen and its such great influence, beyond grand,
    A life is changing and finding out how strong it stands,
    with proper placement I've arranged my fruition,
    its the fruit of knowledge, the root of ambition,
    the stock of pure-blood, purity, the dream of conscious awakening,
    the release of worries and thoughts forsaken,
    the mountain's peak, the foggy mystique,
    the paralleled heart that indulges being unique,
    with this view is the gate of wonder, how strong I've been made,
    I'm roaring thunder, here to relate,
    in this heart of a poet, lies a rainbow innate,
    for now unflinching, worlds are made.

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    this is good stuff. i'm gonna take a second look at it when i'm not drugged up on pain meds. there's a couple things i wanted to suggest. you dont have to pay attention if you dont want. just an opinion.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 16, 2007
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    Ahhhhh Erik, very power, confident, strong, demanding, and radiant this piece is. You have chosen some intricate words to describe yet another angel to you, to us (as I saw myself in this), and the confidence in your poetic step is short of a lyrical dance. I liked this one very much Erik. Thank you for sharing.

    {{{{~~~***KIM***~~~}}}}

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    yeah I think its suitable for the beginning of my 4th book which i'l do maybe a year from now,

    thanks kim its good to feel good about yourself,

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