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Discussion in 'Creative Traditional' started by ~Serenity~, Aug 19, 2006.



    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    I've got a secret in my heart,
    And I know just what to do.
    Come and listen, just a moment,
    I'll share it all with you.
    Put a smile on your face,
    And feel it warm your heart.
    With a spring in your step,
    This is just a start.
    Stop and say hello,
    And a kindly word or two,
    To those who seem to need it,
    Just as you feel you do.
    Give praise as it's earned,
    Keep criticism light.
    If ever caught in argument,
    Do your best to set it right.
    Keep your garbage in the trash,
    And the trash off of your lips.
    Don't just stop to smell the roses,
    When there's daffodils and tulips.
    Not everyone will hurt you in the end,
    There's many people you haven't met.
    Remember that the sun will always rise,
    Not long after it's set.

    ~Serenity~
    A dedication to my favourite cousin and best friend


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Aug 19, 2006
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    Amzy A friend, Well met.

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    Wow! This is incredible. And it's good to see you stray from your darker inspirations.


    Posted By Amzy | Aug 19, 2006
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    PaintedDiary JPiC Mentor

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    Dear Serenity,
    I find this to be refreshing, great rhyming skills, and tells a very nice story. The dedication is very thoughtful as well. These two lines need to be put on a billborad!

    Keep your garbage in the trash,
    And the trash off of your lips.

    I love it!!!!

    Kim

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    Wonderful words to live by and very well said! It's really great to see your brighter side shining through! This could go into the inspirational forum as well as the creative/traditional one! Good stuff - keep it up!


    Posted By Altree94 | Aug 20, 2006
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    Pharoahandrea Reality hurts, not truth!

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    Great flow, I like the analogies and how the everyday life presents something new, not always the same...sun will always rise not long after its set or don't just stop to smell the roses, when there's daffodils and tulips. It also addresses society and how some of us "deal" with unjusts and how we "should deal" with unjusts...If ever caught in argument, do your best to set it right. Keep your garbage in the trash, and the trash off of your lips.

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    Great flow :D

    Awesome work ;D


    Posted By Tanax | Oct 29, 2006
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    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    Thank you guys :) It's great to get such wonderful feedback :)

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Oct 29, 2006
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    Sally Roberts Forestdawn

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    WOW! Serenity

    I loved this! And absolute fabulous piece of work. I read it several times. An awesome read. Thanks for sharing

    Sally aka Forestdawn

    ~Serenity~ ~Pixie Princess~

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    Thank you Ms Sally :) It's so good to hear these kinds of comments

    Smiles!,
    ~Serenity~


    Posted By ~Serenity~ | Oct 29, 2006
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