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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Rapes and cheap thrills and
    moans and deep shrills and…
    squeals of delight?

    Chil’ren of the night
    and bitches and hos
    and birds that crow
    three times in a row,
    do you know me?

    Killin’s and ill-willin’s and
    harsh feelin’s and purse stealin’s and…
    poppin’ pills of ecstasy?

    Chil’ren who next to me
    and exec’s and their sec’s
    and fed-ex
    packages coming like cheap sex,
    do you love me?


    Copyright © 2006 Jacquii Cooke
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    The story of Jesus & Peter always culminates in the story of the three crows that squaaked when Peter denied Jesus... I think this poem is a modern-day cover of that tale.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 12, 2006
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    Dear Ms Jacquii,
    I don't know.....This little rhyming masterpiece here reads like a "Spoken Word" piece, when read out loud! It is strong, raw, real, and demands attention. This was out of sight, rhyming on point, word choice was great, visuals were awesome! Loved it!! Please read it out loud at a Poetry Reading Event, and check out the fierce applause you are gonna receive!

    Kim

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    Wow, MsJ! You've got some powerful words and images happening here. I have to agree with Kimberly - this piece demands to be read out loud - with heavy metal playing in the background! A truly awesome write!


    Posted By Altree94 | Aug 16, 2006
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    MsJacquiiC Poetica Magnifique

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    Hey KIM & TREE - thank you both for commenting on this ditty - I'm glad you enjoyed it as a spokenword piece... I really wasn't quite sure which category to put it in - but I think I'll go ahead and move it LOL

    But really - yeah - this is a slice of the life that I've lead for years now - Kinda fed up with the hypocrisy and thought what better way to get over it than to put it to paper LOL - What you've read is the result!

    Thanx again for the love you've shown for this piece!

    Jacquii.


    Posted By MsJacquiiC | Aug 16, 2006
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