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    GrimmersAngel07 New Member

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    -Amanda's Eyes-
    That hot August morning
    As I got in the driver's seat
    Of the car,
    I back out of the drive
    Knowing of what I left behind.
    On my way to North Carolina and California,
    All that captured my mind
    Were the times I left behind.
    I said goodbye,
    I had to.

    I seen the look in
    Amanda's eyes
    When I looked at her
    And started to say goodbye,
    But instead,
    I said,
    "Until next time, I'll love you all the same."
    I seen tears begin to fall
    From her innocent face,
    I cried with her
    Giving her a hug to last
    Until next time may finally come.

    The horror's she faces
    In her dreams at night
    As she screams my name
    And cries for me in her sleep.

    She didn't understand
    Why I was leaving,
    And I didn't want to hurt her more.

    Each time I talk to her
    Or see her picture,
    My mind remembers
    The look in Amanda's big blue eyes,
    When I said,
    "Until next time."

    Fighting back the tears
    Gets harder with each day.
    Never realizing what you had
    Until you up and leave,
    To start anew.

    The hells and horrors,
    The ups and downs,
    It's all my fault...

    Picturing the tears falling
    From Amanda's eyes...

    I love you my little sister.

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    Hi Holly, I like the emotion in your poem though I was left a little empty in not knowing what compelled the narrator to leave. I look forward toseeing more of your work. Terence


    Posted By Terence | Mar 17, 2008
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    Awww Holly....... this is truly a heartbreaking but beautiful tribute to your little sister. You know there comes a day in all of our lives when we have to make that break .... to take the first step for ourselves. Your little sis will understand one day. The day she takes her first step to the rest of her life. You did Justice to this heartrending situation. It brings me back to my own first step.. Thank you for sharing this beautiful tribute to your sister. I hope she grows to appreciate the love you have for her.

    Mysty


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    GrimmersAngel07 New Member

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    I'm kind of reluctant right now as I leave Friday morning from here to go see her :) for the first time in almost 8 months

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    wow now here's a nube I like jk

    very touching verses,
    and so pretty and emotional,
    you attached heart to this,
    which is a thought to me why show a stranger?
    I keep my pen writing wisdow instead of true heart,
    sharing personal things is hard and I think best kept to yourself,

    one other thing though is when you transcribe your heart like that it is profound and
    undenyable,
    so great job and good luck in the future

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