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    JolieH JPiC Contributor

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    OK,
    This is a little naughty for me, but It was a Sept. challenge at PSU writing workshop. I decided to give it a try.
    Inspired by
    Erik Fischl painting
    Krefeld Project, Living Room Scene 2

    To View painting Click here >>> Recent Works
    It's the fourth one down on the left.

    An afternoon with Fischl

    Sun beats through the apartment window,
    saturating yellow lilies, her bare legs in lime heels.
    A red velvet blanket draped
    over her shoulder like a bull fighters cape,
    hands in her lap, legs crossed,
    a soft smile, admirable stare.

    He stands, across the room, like sculpture,
    loosely posed, robe untied, decorum self-assured.
    Rays of light warm his abdomen, genital exposed,
    head turned away, mouth drawn down,
    he waits approval, not yet giving her notice.


    Posted By JolieH | Sep 27, 2007
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    Hey now Jolie,

    You paint a great picture with words, indeed. The visual is comin' through - it's workin' for me. Nice penning.....

    (next assigment: Write of the girl in the tub....lol)


    Posted By lasher | Sep 27, 2007
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    nomadicrhymer JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    lol@lasher!! Jolie, that was very short and sweet and definitely gave us a very vivid picture...painting aside. I like the play of emotion on both their parts, hers giving and his holding back...the need for approval. Yes, even without the painting I could see it perfectly.

    great write!

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    I thought it was really well written description and all :D


    Posted By Aumakua | Oct 2, 2007
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