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    jasmine321123 New Member

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    An Ocean of tears in a teardrop

    You've squezzed my watery tears from beneath my sealed tight lids,
    poured them in to a lake of crimson red which from my heart had bled,
    drudged out emotions i've never ever felt,
    oh now alone i stand against the brick wall of dusk.

    Eyes aglaze i vaguely catch the rise of my breath,
    stifled as if been smothered by my pumping blood,
    oh not now please let this not be so,
    for i cannot live long with out my soul.

    Tears they slowy drop carressing my face as they flow,
    a million thoughts rest inside that teardrop,
    an Ocean full of all that was me,
    gone now carried away on the shadowed land forever.

    erikestabrook JPiC Premium VIP Member

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    very deep painful phrases, I can say you have imagery pretty much down,
    this poem was great

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    Thank you so much, this poem is about deep heartache. Thanks for taking the time to read it

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    Valerie it was wonderful

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    Again Thank you. I havn't qrote in quite some time and for you to comment on this poem meant a lot *smiles*

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    ah i'm a nobody I oculdn't resist commenting it was so well-written I think you'll get plenty of reviews good to see ya again

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