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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    ANGEL OR DEVIL?

    Devil are you?
    You who twists my thoughts around,
    who makes me want to cry
    and hides away each time someone tries to care.
    You who never listens to a single word I say.
    or lets me feel the love that others give,
    who will not let me laugh.
    You who always talks too much
    and is afraid of love;
    who beats me up
    and always, always gives up.

    Angel are you?
    Who cares about the world wanting to make it right.
    You who makes me happy
    and opens up and trusts.
    You who always listens to everything I say
    and lets me feel the love that others give.
    You who lets me laugh and sing
    and brighten someone’s day;
    who always listens to others problems
    and understands their pain.
    You who believes in love,
    who is not hard on me.
    You who never, never gives up.

    Angel and devil, I'm just me.

    © Karen Davies
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    Posted By Moonchild | May 20, 2008
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    Virgin Rebel International Lover

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    creative piece I really was feeling how you played on the two different perspectives, very well written piece.

    ~Peace

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you VRebel...so glad you could feel it
    and I appreciate your reply :)


    Posted By Moonchild | May 22, 2008
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    Curtis Spider Lee Curtis Spider Lee

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    This is a beautfuly creative poem Karen! I like the way you really shown both sides (Devil/ Angel) in you work here! Wonderfully done!

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Curtis.
    I'm glad you stopped by and liked this one.
    Appreciate it*hugs*


    Posted By Moonchild | May 22, 2008
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    There is a little angel and devil in all of us and hopefully most of the time its the angel beautiful writing Moonchild very creative
    hugs kisses
    tom


    Posted By Bear | May 22, 2008
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    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    :thankyou:Tom
    I appreciate your read and
    reply to my poem*hugs&kisses*


    Posted By Moonchild | May 23, 2008
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    A great piece on the duality in us all! I really thought this was about someone treating you badly until the last part of the second stanza and realized what you were talking about.

    Love it! I found the image fascinating too! Had me wishing I could do that, lol.
    Gail

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Thank you Gail :)
    I guess I did what I meant to do then.
    Appreciate the read and reply*hugs*:girltender:


    Posted By Moonchild | May 23, 2008
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    Tha-Emissary Black Knight!

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    Very Nice Balancing Act & Great Illustrations. I think we all fall somewhere between heaven and hell in our own purgatory where it's not too warm and not too nice, but just right to be ourselves! With it being Memorial Day you know the grill could be a really juicy purgatory for me to put a hamburger.

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    whenever i read somthing i try and understand the story behind it. not just the piece, but the reason it was written and i can't figure out if this is two differant people or one person. because if it is one person who makes you feel this way i can completely understand. very nicely written, maybe you could possibly share the story behind it? i'm very curious. :)

    Moonchild Moon Goddess of Whispers

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    Sounds good to me.
    Thanks Tha-Emissary and Happy
    Memorial Day!:beach:


    Posted By Moonchild | May 26, 2008
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