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Discussion in 'Spoken Word & Freestyle' started by ¤Me¤, Feb 25, 2007.



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    How do you describe a death unknown?
    Was god in the need of a new employee,
    or had the might of sorrow grown?
    Was someone in the need of a guardian,
    Or the chief angel did what he's told?

    I cannot tell a designation,
    Death in a mysterious way,
    Colors changing on a humans face,
    God murdering him on the middle of the day.

    A mysterious seizure, the human's face is blue,
    Chest going up and down,
    though hands sticking to the ground as if there was glue.

    Sent to the up above,
    This human is going to be an angel.
    Series of tests and many things to measure,
    The ceiling changing colors with god's mood,
    and from a window you can see your way of dying.
    Now for this once could god be lying?

    Given with a new name,
    By beginning with only two type of letters,
    Why on earth only A and G?
    Now how much of a guardian angel can a human be?

    They turn back time, and they change the past,
    although their death and non-existing future,
    will always last.
    They help us as people we never knew were here,
    But falling in love was something they shouldn't bear,
    Now why do the death i fear?

    Sparkling blue eyes with no face,
    Lost as a punishment,
    Sinful eyes without the grace,
    And a marble floor clean as a mirror,
    With no reflection on the wall.

    Angels, Not something i want to be at all.


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 25, 2007
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    i like the form and flow of this. the issues i have are where you might have gotten some of the ideas about angels that you did. no we dont become angels and god doesnt murder people. would be interested in knowing where you got these notions.

    zaac


    Posted By zaac | Feb 25, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    hmm...nice writing, but with Zaac...

    i don't think that we become angels either.....

    i'm interested to know where you got these ideas too..

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    Eh, i knew someone would get me wrong :p It was about a dream i've been seeing like ten times in two weeks. I just had to do something about it :p And no, i do not think so either, and god does not murder people. :p


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 26, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    haha Phew...


    eepies...scary dream...of a vengeful god who kills off people for his own uses..."/

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    Yeah i know XD i hope you wouldnt think too weirdly of me, i really dont think of god like that. And yes, it was a very scary dream, and i wonder why i see it so often


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 26, 2007
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    mangodroplet Blue Mango Puppy :]

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    *hugs*

    Do you have these dreams anymore?

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    I had it again last night. I got no idea why i see them, or how my imagination makes me see them :p Maybe im going insane XD


    Posted By ¤Me¤ | Feb 28, 2007
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    I really liked this, to tell you the truth. ^^

    And honestly, the whole angel/god thing in my point of view is... vastly different from the norm. I tend to make people angry with it. *snicker* go figure... me? Cause controversy? NEver!


    Posted By Sealiah | Feb 28, 2007
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    yeah, that's a wierd and scary dream...I knew a girl who kept dreaming about someone in a black hat and black coat...never seeing the face, but seemingly threatening and very frightening!

    and her two sisters had the same dream too...

    only thing I could think of was to tell her to clearly choose God very consciously,

    because then the devil is not allowed to hurt us

    ...remember Jesus saying to Peter "Simon, behold, Satan hath desired to have you, that he may sift you as wheat. But I have prayed for thee, that thy faith fail not"

    Nicely written poem though!! :sign_thanks:

    Nomad

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